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Review by 3VILZOMBI3 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like it, the ambiguity of the story, the openess of the ending. The only thing I would have to say is that the beginning "Have an apple" could have been a stand alone sentence just like in the end, to kind of tie it all together, instead of part of a larger sentence. Nevertheless, a very satisfying read, thank you.
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Rated: E | (2.5)
The story, had a good flow but felt a little choppy. Maybe you can develop the character of Billy and Charlie a little bit more, tie them in with a bit more emotion. There are some sentences that could be compacted so the story flows a bit smoother, but overall good story just needs more emiotional tug.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
It's gives the reader a sad feeling and does a pretty good job of bringing across the break down of the robot by the break down of the words.

misplacèd wrath

I'm pretty sure the punctuated e was done on purpose which actually makes it somewhat funny, a little levity in the sadness.

Over all a good poem.
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