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Rated: E | (3.5)
That's pretty cool! I like the fun facts, keep them coming! I've never been good at yo-yos. I like the additional details like how it was made and why it was used, it definitely peaked my interest. I love a good random fun fact. The only edit I would make would be the last sentence.

"One, it was used as a sacrifice for the Gods, and two, it was used for a 'coming of age' ritual for boys."

Maybe consider phrasing it more like "One theory is...and the other is..." instead of listing them like bullet points. I hope this helped!
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