Hi, I enjoyed reading your poem, Chlorine Dreams. It's a snapshot of how it feels to participate in a sport, which I appreciate. It evokes a feeling of belonging, drive, and competitiveness. I especially like the last stanza. A feeling of belonging is a strong human emotion that nicely brings the poem to a close. I like that you used the sense of smell, too, and touch, connecting with team mates and coaches.
Overall a nicely structured poem.
Hi, I enjoyed reading your poem, Bubba's Corner BBQ. This reminds me of the old Cowboy poems I used to read. Like the descriptions, and the instructions to get this place. The last stanza is the best, and brings everything to a good ending. The beginning is a great setup, taking its time and explaining in colorful terms how to get to the BBQ, and even giving warnings where not to go. Reading this poem made me smile.
Hi, I read your poem, Looking In The Window. I like these type of poems that are 'sing-songy'( I forget what the formal term is).
The forth stanza, the last two lines that begin with We look down and all we see are white scales-What type of scales? Weight scales, or just scales that fall off of something? It is the only line that for me sounds jarring or abrupt, but that's my ears, and I've been told I'm hard of hearing, lol!
I like the theme, as well, of your poem. Who hasn't known someone like this in their life? I've always wondered why when someone buys the perfect house they right away start tearing it apart, another thing that I thought was strange, but maybe that's their way of making it 'Their Own.'
Thank you for letting me read your poem. It was quite enjoyable.
Love the overall cuteness, first of all. A feeling of cheerfulness, and mysteriousness runs throughout the poem. Don't know what type of poem this is, but like that there's an adherence to the format as listed on the bottom. I really like the first two parts. The latter part could be a poem all on its own, as well. Good job of keeping the focus on the snail, but don't know where Willy fits in, except for being the owner of the snail.
Enjoyed reading this story about a dragon slayer and dragon. It had a unique plot that I've never read before. I found the sentence structure to be good throughout. Felt the ending should have been at the beginning, because I found the Dragon to be more important to the story and more enjoyable than the dragon slayer. It could have worked as well to have the Dragon as the main character, since she was given inner dialogue and feelings about the dragon slayer. This is a fantasy story, and this would have been acceptable to the reader and not out of place, if the reader reads a lot of fantasy stories.
Overall, great plot and characters. Thanks for letting me read your story.
Just a slight suggestion, to include Oreo in the first line, such as' Oreo, my wonderful tuxedo cat'.
But it's not necessary. It's a beautiful poem as is. I lost my kitty last year, and I still miss her. She was so sweet and loving. They are the best friends we can ever have. Thank you for letting me read your poem.
I really like how brushing teeth is prominent in this story. I just got a kitten so teeth brushing is new to me, lol. He kind of likes it, but not really. Almost all of his teeth are in already!
I also like how the scent of Ginger is used, too. A cute story that parents would like to read to their children, or that a child would like to read. Good job!
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