Nice, short, concise in the point wanting to be made.....I really liked this short piece.....job well done....
As others have told me, I tell you - keep writing, keep writing, keep writing - writing gives us a unique freedom from a variety of things, people and places.
Not sure where the title Communication comes in, unless it relates to the two sides of the knife blade.
I do see the line you followed and how some lines can so easily fall in more than one direction.
I find this poem interesting in the number of emotions it touches on.
I also find this poem a little confusing as to where it was going, but it does make a point for those who hear voices and fight their inner demons on a regular basis.
Interesting....way to use the power of our own insecurities to show how we make judgements on those we think are very different from us.....
At first I felt you left the reader hanging at the end, but in re-reading the last couple of paragraphs I then realized you finished in the best way you could.....
Look forward to reading some of your works again....thanx
More along my kind of poetry....ones with a basic count and rhyme.......
I like how you bring the reader along with what appears to be a trip, then zap us into what was a dream.....a dream of hope, the kind of hope you needed when facing such adversity......
With the exception of a couple of lines that almost seemed out of step, very well written....thanx for sharing.
I felt like I misstepped part way through.....you made some great points to think about.....last bit was a notch out of joint, you lost the ryhme......
Continue to plug on your mind will release itself with the pen....
Cute short story with the option of various degrees of interpretation to what the light at the end represents.
At first I thought you left me hanging in the end, but then realized you were putting the reader in a wonderful position of thought, imagination or interpretation.
Enjoyed, look forward to reading more of this writers works.
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