A smooth ride reading this from beginning to end. I chanced upon this story featured by the editor of The Author's WDC Newsletter. Glad I did. I felt the way your muse guides your imagination. It was an honor in deed to meet you both.
eye catching way to form this short story about the meaning of a pebble with lines centered. The lesson learned by the listener as told by the old philosopher was brought forth in a simple to understand way. The mental exercise of dropping worried thoughts might need a little added instruction on how that process might be done to be effective without the worries come back quickly again. Or if repetition is the key, a word or two explaining why. Thanks for sharing.
It is healing to share feelings in chosen written words. What I like best is the ability to come back and visit them, reflect on them as time passes. Having recently lost my wife of 20 years, your poem held special meaning. Find ways to celebrate the love once given by sharing it in the here and now.
I found this tragic poem by clicking on the Read & Review button. Short, intense rhyme guided my thoughts with ease down the slippery slope of love lost in deceit. Every word well chosen as they led my thoughts on. Thank you for sharing.
Fun. Lively. Descriptive. The ending links up nicely with the beginning giving a satisfying feeling of completion. I liked the detailed references to places up north, making the visit charmingly real. thanks for sharing.
I dropped by your port after receiving a very welcome review from you. Thank you for sharing this honest window into your life. The way you write brought it instantly into a reality standing firmly on its own and enveloping me within it. Thanks for sharing. Write more. I'm already a fan.
Loved the clear and brittle tension vibrating between the background and between the characters. It felt like being tossed into the flashing embrace of another world from the first sentence to the last. Thanks for sharing.
Found this perfectly presented poetry while punching the Read & Review button. I don't see many of these types of creative endeavor and was pleasantly surprised. A fun read, captivated by the choice of wording into a plot line. Fun. Take care and write on.
This popped up when I clicked the Read & Review button. Quite the colorful display. What impressed me besides your talent in using WDC code is that all the entries are still valid. Not one link from the writers has been deleted. It was fun to go back and read from the selection. Take care and have a good day.
Impressive walk through the jungle with easy to follow steps to see the adventures taken where they led. Much better than breadcrumbs. What I liked best was the variety of writing/reading related goals with notches made on your belt. You've definitely made a second home in the wilds of WDC.
Driving rythmn, relentess focus, and willful power untamed make this pure poetry. An internal fight to conquer no Buddhist monk would ever touch or claim. Thanks for sharing.
lots going on in this poem offering its reflections on human behavior and how intimacy intertwines with social norms. I liked the visual detailed example compared with broader one of color that most commonly relate one way or another with. Thanks for sharing.
I couldn't stop reading, loved the description of the wrong looking house. Not having read the other chapters, I missed a detailed look at the individual characterizations of the kids and adults. The beautiful aunt in place of an older stereotype stood out. The interplay between the kids helped but they still tended to blend into the plot. Thanks for sharing. Great imagination on brilliant display.
Lovely sentiment in poetic form. I enjoyed the read and emotional undertone. It was interesting seeing the note explaining the origin of the poem's theme. Thanks for sharing.
Hi Twiga. Shucks, you've been here since 2007. I'm a talking animal, but prefer to type this review on my laptop. Nice to meet you, master of the Haiku. Three five star ratings already for this poem, a tribute to its corny nature. I like the kernal of truth expressed in its few short lines. Thanks for sharing.
One good idea after another made this short but fact filled post a worthwhile read. I've done several November 'write a 50,000 word novel' successes but left the raw first effort when following the examples listed here would have taken me back to work on a second draft, because the quality of my work would have been better. Thanks for sharing.
The short setup effectively made way for the surprise (and gut wrenching) ending. It leaves a questioning half mystery unresolved but sure is there. Thanks for sharing this intriguing bit of mind play in written form.
Love the imagery, so descriptive and powerful. It brings out the poetic form with a hard emotional embrace of what narcissistic love is. Thanks for sharing.
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