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Review by Bryce Raffle Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting poem. I particularly like the alliteration in "gears and gizmos" and I like the imagery of "oil for blood." Personally, I think "Slowly, the creature awakens" works better than "Slow the creature awakes" and I would consider revising to "as the maestro finishes his tune." Nice imagery overall.
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