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67 Public Reviews Given
67 Total Reviews Given
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Direct and honest. Will try to be respectful.
I'm good at...
Characters, power systems, and worlds.
Favorite Genres
Fantasy and fiction.
Least Favorite Genres
Horror.
Favorite Item Types
Short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Novels.
I will not review...
Anything overtly violent or sexual.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
First story I've come across with a potion theme. While it doesn't seem to be the type of story I would be intrested in, I can definitely see the appeal.

Allowing different effects based on what the Reader/Writer is intrested in give more possibilities for the story to branch off into.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
An intresting idea, but it sadly seems undeveloped. While I can't speak for others, having a time limit on choice chapters seems very limiting.

I can understand the rule, as I have been done a slog of choice chapters, but I wonder if that also includes the basic choice chapters that show up at the beginning.
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Review of Anime Exchanger  Open in new Window.
Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Intresting twist on the idea of altering realty. Having it that two things need to be swapped for the device to work forces a greater level of creativity for the writers. This makes the chapters more fun to read, as I was curious what was going to be swapped.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a great start to the story. I especially like how you went and gave different plots for people who prefer a different story to go immediately where they want.

The expansion of just a sense to 'how' was a clever idea. Not something I was expecting, considering your first story.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes. I can understand that kind of fear. Whatever circumstances could lead up to getting rid of what you see as precious can be a terrifying prospect.

The fact that you were willing to share this at all shows that you're not afraid of showing weakness. This was very brave of you.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A decent attempt at a fight scene. Its not badly written, but I can tell this isn't something you're completely comfortable with yet.

Despite that, the action is good, well paced, and gives the idea that Samson clearly knows what he's doing.

The ending also show,that he can't handle everything.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Intresting idea you have here. Reminds me of games like InFamous and Prototype, monsters running amok with no one to stop them.

The idea of a reporter being sent into this Hell Zone gives decent world building as to how little is known to the outside world.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This was a surprisingly long one compared to your previous tales.

The fact that Sam seems to have a feared reputation seems intresting, and possibly something worth diving into for a future story.

The way she seems to take command so easily also shows dedication to some form of training. It'd be intresting to see where that training came from.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This. I liked this. There are so many stories for monsters being villains, or subvert the trope by being heroes, but not many people think about if the monster was just a normal everyday citizen.

It also has good world building, the way the cold caller had items specifically for him. Very clever.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This was an enjoyable read. The idea of Sam not having the best memories of Christmas was a good choice, as not everyone enjoys the holiday.

The repititon of "Sam hated Christmas" was also a good touch. It pushed her dislike while also building to the crescendo of what her family means to her.
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Review of How to be special  Open in new Window.
Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a deep and meaningful read. Using the chess pieces to show the difference ways people can be see was a clever idea. But having Pawn reject the typical promotion to a more valuable piece and remain true to who he is was a very powerful choice.


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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very clever idea, putting all of you're Pokémon related questions into one Folder to ensure they are easier to find.

Personally, I love how you're asking your watchers what you should do with your story. However, I don't think you should stick to the given answers if it doesn't work for you.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Personally, I think you should do Pasio. Not only does that give a large amount of characters, but also the characters you're looking for.

Not to mention, you've done Kanto once for the anime, twice for the manga, and thrice for the games. You don't need to do Kanto anymore than is already necessary.
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Review of Closed Questions  Open in new Window.
Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very clever idea, to keep a "Closed" Folder for Polls that you don't need anymore, but still keep to ensure you still have the answer until you need them.

However, I personally think that the Folder should be private as there's no need for use to see it.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very good question. Personally, I like them all, though I would like to know why they are the only Pokémon that are able to know the Pledge moves and their abilities.

I understand it's more about gameplay than about logic, but it's still something that could use an in-universe reason.
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Review of Grass Starter  Open in new Window.
Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very good question. Personally, I like them all, though I would like to know why they are the only Pokémon that are able to know Grass Pledge and Overgrow.

I understand it's more about gameplay than about logic, but it's still something that could use an in-universe reason.
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Review of Fire Starter  Open in new Window.
Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very good question. Personally, I like them all, though I would like to know why they are the only Pokémon that are able to know Fire Pledge and Blaze.

I understand it's more about gameplay than about logic, but it's still something that could use an in-universe reason.
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Review of Water Starter  Open in new Window.
Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very good question. Personally, I like them all, though I would like to know why they are the only Pokémon that are able to know Water Pledge and Torrent.

I understand it's more about gameplay than about logic, but it's still something that could use an in-universe reason.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Overall, a good set of rules that set up the explanation of each series properly. While it makes sense to put them each into their own Items to prevent Interactive openers from being too long, I hope this doesn't cause problems for you in the future.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
An equally straightforward set of rules, alongside a logically level of gaining from Region to Region. However, it seemed you've missed out Clement's age. Being a Gym Leader, I suspect he would be a little older than Ash.

I'm also curious if you'll be adding an age rule on Horizons/Paldea for Liko and Roy.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very simple and straightforward rules. Though I am curious as to why the main characters (minus Yuya) seem to have been left out.

Slight bias here, but I'm personally a fan of the theory that the original series was the unseen Ritual Dimension. Mainly because I like the idea of each card type getting its own dimension.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A fairly long set of rules, with equally fair reasonings given for each. It must have taken a great deal of work to figure this all out. Though, I do wish there was a reason given for Tangle and Whisper, even if it was just "because I say so."

I have noticed so errors. And I will not be counting the beginning explanation as a paragraph.

Paragraph 2: You put "Tailstube" despite having spelt it "TailsTube" later on.
Paragraph 3: I think you meant "there is actually evidence," not "she is actually evidence."
Paragraph 5: You put "Starline's" despite the "'s" not being necessary.
Minor error: The beginning explanation, Paragraph 6, and the last 3 don't end with punctuations.


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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Since the rules are placed in two, I'll do the same.

A fair distinction to seperate the games by in-game details. While I haven't played much Paper Mario, I thought Super Paper Mario's ability to move from 2D to 3D would have made it a Paper World.

I, personally, am not a fan of the internal warp pipe idea, mainly because I feel you're taking too literally what feels more like a game play mechanic. Still, if you feel this is best for what you're going for, who am I to argue.
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Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Use all three versions, that allows for a far more expansive story, along with a far greater level of potential.

It'll also be interesting to see how those three versions of Sabrina you mentioned would interact. I hope to see this story when you're done.
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Review of Liko Visits Holon  Open in new Window.
Review by S.F.A Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I personally think you should add them when the journey ends. While that may take a while, it makes more sense to continue the rules you've put upon yourself.

Even so, it doesn't stop them from being added to the path of others. Only from their own.
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