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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Kelchworth I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Totally Tall Tales " Open in new Window. by Kelchworth

Clarity:A good title that gets my curiosity wanting to read more.

Writing style:Action adventure drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? Nicely structured making it easy for the reader as well as inviting to a browser.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Great dialog that does seem appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---Stolen the ride, to get revenge on the asses at the school and both car and road were conspiring to punish him - for the theft?---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A good opening with plenty of action to grab my attention. Good descriptions with very realistic dialogue both helped take the reader into this tale.

The twist at 'how my grand pappy met his fate' caught me unprepared. A nice ending for chapter one.

Chapter two was delightful even though personally I'm not a big fan of zombies. Ending with a bit of mystery to get the reader thinking.


Kelchworth thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Nicely done however a good reread and edit never hurts.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Kanishka Sanyukt I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "European Union: A Halal Bildungsroman" Open in new Window. by Kanishka Sanyukt

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A political poem in a unique original style.
Well written in a realistic yet humorous style. A great idea for this sign of the times historical tale.
I like the realistic yet humorous style. Consider shorting some of the longer sentences to keep a more uniform structure, as they seem to linger. A wonderful work however for me it seemed to ramble on a bit toward the end.


Kanishka Sanyukt thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Last Chance  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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My impressions of the poem: "Last Chance" Open in new Window. by Silvern

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:
Seems like a good poem, it is just written in a language that I don't quite get. To me it reads like it was picked from the middle missing the introduction which leaves me guessing.

A sport poem that seems to be ranting about an unpopular rule or decision.
Sports fans especially the hardcore ones do seem to have a secret language that only they understand. I have to admit I don't get it.
This work does indeed have a catchy tone that sticks in your head.


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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My impressions of the poem: "a seat with insomnia" Open in new Window. by vapid

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A seat with insomnia is a gothic dark style free verse poem. Well written with deep undertones. It feels like this was written at a low point in the author's life.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a dark mysterious realm where nothing at all makes sense and sleep is forbidden. The birth place of misery where one can't get out of bed.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this deep work.

vapid thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of I Miss...  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My impressions of the poem: "I Miss..." Open in new Window. by SeanFhear

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A free verse romance poem with three psychedelic stanzas. I really like the opening line.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a soul longing for the company of one whose path took a different direction long ago.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can't find any problems at all with this entertaining philosophy.

SeanFhear thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Kelchworth I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"Lemme buy those shoes." Open in new Window. by Kelchworth

Clarity:A catchy title.

Writing style:Sci-fi adventure drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only two, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Nicely structured.*Smile*

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog is specific for its speaker. *Smile*

My favorite line:---"Time to dance" he said as he whipped his hand behind his back and pulled the snub nosed slug thrower. ---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: a good opening line that catches my attention and makes me want to read more.

Well written with great descriptions that easily take the readers straight into the tale.

Short and to the point with plenty of action and a nice twist at the end. That seems to be the way the modern reader likes things.

Kelchworth thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write on!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi *Smile*Fivesixer I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Lincoln Penny" Open in new Window. by Fivesixer

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: As they have just now discontinued making the penny this seems like a very appropriate subject for the time. So they say it cost almost 4 cents to make a 1 cent penny. Only in the good old' USA. At least I feel like most countries would have shot it down when the cost exceeded the product.

'Head or tail I don't understand my scope or range.'
This is a well written free verse poem decades ahead of its time.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: 'Kindness and ignorance both work themselves out in the end, like the flipped sides of a Lincoln penny that you don't get a choice in common.'

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this classic work that is ahead of its time.

Fivesixer thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Happy Birthday  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi Dave Ryan I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Happy Birthday" Open in new Window. by Dave Ryan

Clarity:Seems like a good title for tale.

Writing style: Fantasy horror drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Smile* Indeed by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? *Smile* A nice structure that does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Smile* Yes the dialog does seem to be appropriate for its speaker.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Most people would think that a 240 word short story would be easy. Those people don't have a clue.
The author has so little to work with, meaning he must make every word count. That is what you have done in this delightful tale. A delightful entertaining story, short and straight to the point. Just the way the modern reader likes things.

Seems like you met the prompt requirements well, I hope you won the contest. 240 words is not a lot to work with yet what a entertaining and delightful tale. Even a slight bit of mystery at the end.

Dave Ryan thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.


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Joseph
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Review of Black Water  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi again *Moon* HuntersMoon I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Black Water" Open in new Window. by HuntersMoon

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:'The river Styx is calling me' Wow what a great idea. Well written English Sonnet, this poem has a deep mysterious flow. I hope you won the contest.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The image of an ancient philosopher who has fell deep into a dream reality where it takes all his strength to finally free himself and return to world of the awaken.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:I can't find anything at all wrong with this enchanting poem.

HuntersMoon thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Preshi Writes I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The poetry girl(part 2)" Open in new Window. by Preshi Writes

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A truly charming enlightened poem describing the captivating yet mysterious 'poetry girl'.

This short to the point free verse poem carries a positive flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of an anonymous poet that has countless admirers longing to know her identity.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with this simply delightful work.*Sly* *Party* *Smile*

Preshi Writes thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Prem Junior I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "What a Fool I've Become" Open in new Window. by Prem Junior

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A deep romance poem that has the author focusing on the positive aspects and lessons learned from a past relationship.

Written in a realistic free verse form that carries an overall positive flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a soul reflecting on a past relationship while realizing the lessons learned from the experience and being grateful and thankful for them.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can't find no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this deep and positive poem.

Prem Junior thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Jatlog the Green I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Shelter in Place " Open in new Window. by Jatlog the Green

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:This poem shows that it was written in the uncertain time of the pandemic when life as we knew stopped. Masks had to be worn. Social distancing, businesses closed, Holidays canceled even the skies had no traffic. That brief time that seemed to linger forever where the whole world had come to a stop.

This well worded poem takes me back to that point in time that will forever be carved in my memory.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a world that has stopped and fell back over a hundred years in time. The people in solitude and isolation redefine everything they were ever taught. Slowly a different world emerges and works hard to make up for that lost time.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with this strong and emotional poem that has taken me back a few years in the past.

Jatlog the Green *Mindblown* *Mars* thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi again Ri_leigh I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "LOVE IS NOT JUST A FEELING..." Open in new Window. by Ri_leigh

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:An in depth view of 'love' with opposing ideas. Posing many good questions that are mostly answered in the last line of this entertaining work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of an ancient philosopher deep in thought trying to define an emotion that cannot be defined.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems with the grammar of mechanics of this entertaining work.

Ri_leigh thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi again Winchester Jones I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Love in a Burning Cabin" Open in new Window. by Winchester Jones

Clarity:A good title that peaks my curiosity.

Writing style:Crime gangster romance drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only two are given by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Nice structure and format that does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Indeed the dialogue does seem to be appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---We were ten feet apart, sitting on the wood floor under two different shattered glass windows. Fuzzy lights, like colored smoke, pulsed in through the splintered walls, filling the room with reds and blues.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well written in a realistic yet entertaining tale. A good opening that gets my attention and makes me want to read on. Great descriptions and dialog that lets me get to know the characters.

Short and straight to the point just the way the modern reader likes it. I like the ending.

Winchester Jonesthank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write ✍ on!

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again Jacky I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Like Father, Like Son" Open in new Window. by Jacky


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My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A catchy title that comes to use at the end of this delightful tale. A very realistic sounding conversation written with all dialog that let the reader know these characters.

A delightful and entertaining story. Well done!*BigSmile*

Jackythank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.


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Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Ri_leigh I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Behind Every Word Lies A Secret" Open in new Window. by Ri_leigh

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A free verse poem written in a realistic tone that lets the reader feel the emotions from this deep work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The image of two realities moving on a slow timeline until finally the poet and her character combine.
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Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see.

Ri_leigh thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Stand Up  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi autumnjave I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Stand Up" Open in new Window. by autumnjave

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A deep emotional romance poem that the title describes well. Written in a realistic serious tone with a humorous overtone.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The image of a soul looking over the ocean of time. Remembering past encounters while realizing how blessed they are.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work.

autumnjave thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi again Kanishka Sanyukt I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"A Note to Blah Blah Blah (Short-Part 1)" Open in new Window. by Kanishka Sanyukt

Clarity:Even though the title is interesting it still could better describe the contents of this tale.

Writing style:Modern romance drama.
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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A fair structure. Consider breaking down the longer paragraphs into shorter ones and possibly a larger font. This will make it easier for the reader and more appealing to a browser or a would be reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes.

My favorite line:---The music that we listen to is different; the films and TV series that we grew up with are different; we both speak the same language, but our accents are different. Even the phrases and the words we use are different.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written romance style drama. Good descriptions with a realistic tone make it easy for the reader to relate with this tale.

Kanishka Sanyukt thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider opening with ' You were staring fixedly at me. Our eyes met, and I immediately looked away as if I had seen something repulsive.' This seems like a stronger opening line that should grab the readers attention.
Consider a good edit to breakdown the longer paragraphs. This will make it easier for the reader and more inviting for a browser or would be reader. Avoid starting sentences with 'and' or 'but'.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Keaton Foster: Know My Hell! I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "A Splinter In The Sky" Open in new Window. by Keaton Foster: Know My Hell!

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A free verse written in a unique and original style with many deep questions about our reality.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a poet laying on his back staring at the sky then writing down all the questions about what he sees.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I could find no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this deep work.

Keaton Foster: Know My Hell! thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Kanishka Sanyukt I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"A Note to Blah Blah Blah (Final-Part 3)" Open in new Window. by Kanishka Sanyukt

Clarity: The title could better describe the contents of this tale.

Writing style:Modern folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one is listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes the dialog is appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---“A peacock never hides its feathers.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: An interesting work with a good twist at the end. This seems like a good work that could be incorporated in future stories, however as a stand alone it seems too vague.

Kanishka Sanyukt thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider expanding with a better title, a stronger opening line and more details.

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Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi momorabo I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Happy New Year♥!　9" Open in new Window. by momorabo

Clarity: Intriguing title

Writing style: Personal biographical drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Smile* Nicely structured.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Smile*The dialog is realistic.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Great descriptions that describe the tale and slowly carry you into the story.

The opening is a bit confusing for me. It seems to start in the middle of an existing chapter. Well described in a diary entry fashion with realistic details however no real excitement. Finally a little excitement at the end.

momorabo thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: In this modern day fast-paced world the modern reader seems to like things quick and to the point. Consider experimenting with an edit focusing on readers with short attention spans.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Hi SPACE COBWEBS I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "To Autumn" Open in new Window. by SPACE COBWEBS

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful five line poem that in a few words gives a great description of autumn.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of the mountains in autumn painted with a rainbow of all colors from the beautiful leaves preparing to fall.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I could see.

SPACE COBWEBS thank you for sharing your poem.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Seuzz I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Possessor of the Dead" Open in new Window. by Seuzz

Clarity:An intriguing title that catches the reader's attention.

Writing style:Horror mystery drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Nicely structured making it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes the dialog does seem appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- He crept anon in the sultry nights over the lawns of Montremont, spying at the now decayed mansion and imagining the cotillions in its days of antebellum glory, and imagining himself in attendance; imagining himself, indeed, as their host.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A strong opening that begins to draw the reader into this tale. A well described storyline that keeps the readers attention.
Seems like a great entry for the weird tales contest.

Seuzz thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a good edit trying to eliminate starting sentences with and or but.

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Hi Howl I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The only chain we want to always wear" Open in new Window. by Howl

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A strong free verse poem that ask questions that get the reader's mind thinking.

A random rhyming scheme that adds to the serious flow of this work.


Artistic Voice and Imagery: The image of a futuristic world where the past chains of society have been broken and mothers are in total control. A pleasant peaceful world where everyone is happy.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this strong and entertaining poem.

Howl thank you for sharing your poem.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Rojodi I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:""Three Gargoyles"" Open in new Window. by Rojodi

Clarity:A intriguing title that caught my attention.

Writing style:Horror fantasy drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one given, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog is appropriate for it's speaker.

My favorite line:---It had a cat face, or an artist on LSD would believe was a cat. No whiskers, but there were feline features.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A good opening that slowly carries the reader into this suspenseful tale. Written in a realistic tone that makes it easy for the reader to relate with the characters while pulling him deeper into this Halloween tale.

Well structured in a realistic timely fashion with good descriptions that paint the scenes helping the reader visualize this tale.

Harry is a nice touch, keeping the story real before unleashing the gargoyles'.

A good ending that leaves room for the reader's mind to keep guessing.


Rojodithank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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