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Review of A Moment in Time  Open in new Window.
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Hi again Jacky I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"A Moment in Time" Open in new Window. by Jacky

Clarity: Nice title for this private eye tale.

Writing style:Folktale mystery drama.

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Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The nice structure and format does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Indeed the dialogue is appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- Randy quickly picked up a big broken tree branch and wacked the guy right on the back of his head with it. ---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: I hope you won the contest because this short story is awesome. Short straight to the point in a most entertaining way.

A great opening that definitely makes the reader want to read more.

Jacky thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write on!

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of We would’ve  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My impressions of the poem: "We would’ve " Open in new Window. by B.K.K.

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A delightful and entertaining poem written with a repeating line or theme.
'We would've' is a nicely worded poem emphasizing on the past, which unfortunately we can't change. "We will" would be quite a challenging prompt for a future work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of two souls navigating the rapids of time searching for that common point where their lifelines will become one.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I could find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this charming poem.

B.K.K. thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of My class…  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My impressions of the poem: "My class…" Open in new Window. by Nightblue

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A very entertaining and humorous poem that indeed shows off a talented writing skill.

A good rhyming scheme that enhances the entertaining flow of this strong work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a chaotic classroom where the teacher is running late so some of the students have taken over trying desperately to show off for the one talented student who pays them no mind. Instead writes a creative poem about the spectacle.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining delight.

Nightblue thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Longest Day  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "The Longest Day" Open in new Window. by C. Evil

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A deep and delightful poem with six strong stanzas emphasizing on the flow of time and our perception of it.

A unique rhyming scheme that enhances and adds to the philosophical flow of this deep work that has got this readers mind to spinning.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of an insect that is born and lives its entire lifespan in a matter of hours.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I could find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this enchanting poem.

C. Evil thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My impressions of the poem: "Things i never said " Open in new Window. by Tessgii

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A emotional free verse style romance poem with strong emotions that can be felt by the reader.
Love is such a strong emotion that it often sparks our creativity. Sometimes it is easier to close a chapter then move on with life after expressing a certain past event or relationship on paper.

A well worded strong poem. Short and to the point this poem carries a realistic flow.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful work.

Tessgii thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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My impressions of the poem: "Just Another Sunday" Open in new Window. by ant da costa

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A strong well worded free verse poem written with a lot of deep mystery for the reader to try and decipher. Personally for me this poem is a tad bit long however it does show off your very talented writing skills.

Strong emotions scream out at the reader from each stanza.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this powerful work.

ant da costa thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of find the stars  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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My impressions of the poem: "find the stars" Open in new Window. by ggbid

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: An interesting work 'that started somewhere and went in a different direction.'

A good strong title. In today's high tech cyber world the modern reader is so busy they tend to like and prefer things short and straight to the point. A lot of good stuff here however personally for me it reads kind of like a first draft. Consider saving and filing to reference and use parts on future works.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the mechanics of this work.

ggbid thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Far  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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My impressions of the poem: "Far " Open in new Window. by Alexis

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A strong and delightful free verse poem emphasizing on forgiveness and 2nd and third chance's. A great philosophy as through time people change, of course there is always those seldom few who managed to always make you regret given them another chance. On the other hand the vast majority most often turns into a positive experience for both of you which outweighs the few bad experiences.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this powerful work.

Alexis thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of What if  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi CHAN I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "What if " Open in new Window. by CHAN

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A delightful free verse style poem with a repeating first line of each stanza. 'What if?' It is so easy to get lost with the what ifs, kind of like hindsight. Everything looks clear when you look back at it however you can't change the past.
What if you take a gamble and just tell her exactly how you feel? She may break your heart or she may become your life long soul mate.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful work.

CHAN thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Breathe Me Again  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi David I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Breathe Me Again" Open in new Window. by David

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A deep and touching free verse style romance poem. Well worded poem, the deep emotions can be felt by the reader.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: Gazing over the ocean of time I see the image of 2 lovebirds trapped in the currents of time. 1 keeps circling around the other as to keep a safe distance and not lose track.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I see with grammar spelling or mechanics of this charming work.

David thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Eight Years  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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My impressions of the poem: "Eight Years" Open in new Window. by Nikita Devoue

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A free verse style romance poem emphasize on a long past romance. The emotions can be felt in this poem. Eight years is indeed a long time I surely hope you have moved on with life as most often we learned from our mistakes and past relationships to make us stronger for the future as well as future relationships.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the spelling grammar on mechanics of this charming poem.

Nikita Devoue thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My impressions of the poem: "Sublime Enchantment" Open in new Window. by rjsimonson

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful poem with short yet strong stanzas. An original style that enhances the authentic flow of this charming poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of one walking on air while appreciating some of nature's most fine compliments.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I see with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this enchanting poem.

rjsimonson thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Source  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Fyn I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Source" Open in new Window. by Fyn

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A strong well worded free verse poem. I like the beginning starting with 'Went searching'.

A great start that I can relate to and feel most readers will. The original style of this work adds to the unique overall flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a soul stranded in the sea of time. Searching through the darkness until finally realizing the light that was within would be the source of recovery.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this classic poem.

Fyn thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Synthia I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Hourglass in Reverse" Open in new Window. by Synthia

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong and delightful eight line poem with a nice rhyming pattern that adds to the deep rhythmic flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: Looking over the ocean of time I see two souls linked together in a constant effort to help the other.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work.

Synthia thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My impressions of the poem: "Stay Shocked or Lose It All" Open in new Window. by TheBusmanPoet

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong poem emphasizing the fact that citizens must speak their mind or the political machine will take over with no considerations to what the citizens really think.

' We as a people need to stay shocked if not we are relinquishing our rights and when this happens you lose it all.'


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I see with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this well worded poem.

TheBusmanPoet thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Than Pence I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Inside, Looking Out" Open in new Window. by Than Pence

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A deep well worded poem that describes a reality of one inside, looking out.

Strong stanzas with a rhythmic rhyming pattern come together to give this poem it's deep flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a soul trapped in an old abandoned house in the pouring rain. Helplessly staring out the window at the never ending rain.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I see with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this deep poem.

Than Pence thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Unholy Obsession  Open in new Window.
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Hi Don Two I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Unholy Obsession" Open in new Window. by Don Two

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Obsessive compulsive disorder, that might just be a part of my problem.
'Allowing bulldog to hold on tight.' Many powerful lines in this deep 'matter of the mind' poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of someone who is easily pulled in to everyday task yet has a hard time ending that task. An obsessive compulsive disorder or OCD, excessive thoughts that lead to repetitive behaviors.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I could find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this deep work.

Don Two thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Fiddler  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi David Levins I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"The Fiddler" Open in new Window. by David Levins

Clarity:A good title that piques my interest.

Writing style:Folklore fiction drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one is listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Nice structure that makes it easy for the reader as well as inviting for a browser or potential reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- However, after ten years, his violin felt less like an extension of his soul and more like a cog in a well-oiled machine.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A nice opening that gives a good description of Tommy. Nice description of Savannah that helps the reader visualize it.

An easy paced entertaining tale about Tommy the fiddler. I like that he turned his violin into a fiddle to play music for everyday people. A good ending that starts his journey all over.

David Levins thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:A good edit never hurts consider a stronger opening line to better grab the reader's attention and possibly adding more action. Keep in mind that today's modern reader has a short attention span thus likes things short and straight to the point.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi danielbird I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The breathless hearts descent " Open in new Window. by danielbird

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful and entertaining romance poem with a nice rhyming pattern that express a strong sense of romance.

This poem carries a deep catchy flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of two souls that have fell in love however they are from different family backgrounds that make it nearly impossible for them to commit to a life together.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this powerful love poem.

danielbird thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again Jeffhans I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"The Delta Threshold " Open in new Window. by Jeffhans

Clarity:A good title that intrigues my curiosity.

Writing style:Folklore adventure drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Smile* Indeed by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Smile* A nice inviting structure that makes it easy for the reader

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Smile*

My favorite line:---then she found it: a scanned page from a 19th-century ethnographer’s journal, buried in an academic archive. A tribal elder, speaking of a disaster—a flood, a fire, something that drove his people underground. They’d survived, he said, because the Ant-Eyed People took them in.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A good opening that introduces Mira with good descriptions that help to understand her world.
Well described settings that paint a picture of the story-line while introducing the mystery that Mira is unraveling.

A entertaining folktale. Nice ending 'some truths were better left buried'.

Jeffhansthank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider adding a bit of dialog as the modern readers seem to expect.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Designs  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi again JACE I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Designs" Open in new Window. by JACE

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Great information and example of a Sedoka poem. A well worded poem that gives a glimpse of our darker side. Two three line katauta addressing the same subject from different perspectives. 'Sharks, trolling waters --- rebellious souls lead to pain.'

In these modern times it seems that poetic exploration is becoming a lost art that is found less with each turn of the hands of time.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Well done.

JACE thank you for sharing this poetic lesson.
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Review of My sweet Marilyn  Open in new Window.
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My impressions of the poem: "My sweet Marilyn" Open in new Window. by Jocie

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A free verse poem written in an original style focusing on Marilyn Monroe.

Indeed Marilyn Monroe was one of those icons that died young leaving a legend for the ages to debate about. Always remembered and preserved at that young age.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of movie star rising to the top of her craft. Becoming so popular and untouchable that no one could see or hear her cries for help. Dying young with a legacy that gave the ages more to talk about.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems with the grammar spelling on mechanics of this entertaining poem.

Jocie thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Almsgivers  Open in new Window.
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Hi again Kare iauu Enga I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Almsgivers" Open in new Window. by Kare iauu Enga

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful poem that puts the readers mind to work trying to solve or decipher the puzzle.

A free verse poem written in an original style that does indeed carry a Mystic flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of two children growing up under the hot Arkansas sun. One being a religious pet lover of dogs and cats. The other being a technological nerd with not much concept of animal loving however a strong understanding of technology for the age coming in the short future. They become close friends helping each other to understand the values of the other. This understanding helps prepare them both for their walk in the future.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this charming poem.

Kare iauu Enga thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Parking  Open in new Window.
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Hi again Jacky I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"Parking" Open in new Window. by Jacky

Clarity:A good title for this parking tale.

Writing style:Contest entry sci-fi adventure.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only two are given, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nice structure that does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Great dialog that is specific to its speaker.

My favorite line:---Now, feeling he was dealing with someone slightly unbalanced, Joe decided to just go along. “Great, thank you!” he said, moving his car.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Nicely told with a realistic start that suddenly turns into a sci-fi adventure that caught me totally off guard. Did Joe ever get to go for that run?

Jacky thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*BigSmile* Keep up the good work.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Hi ggbid I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "elephants on parade" Open in new Window. by ggbid

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written description of a stay in a psych ward. I once visited a friend that was in a similar situation. This poem brings back those memories well.
The wait for someone to visit is described well and I definitely feel your discouragement as time seems to stand still.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a person trapped in a locked floor where elephants roam free.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this realistic poem .

ggbid thank you for sharing your poem.
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