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Review of energy rock test  Open in new Window.
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Hi WindSpirit3 I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"energy rock test" Open in new Window. by WindSpirit3

Clarity: An interesting title.

Writing style: Spiritual experience activity article.

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Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Nicely laid out.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Eastern medicine’s ‘Energy Rocking’ a well described process for this, what seems like a lifelong experiment for you.

Ask yourself a question and if you rock forward it's true, if you rock backwards it's false. A nice touch with the ‘humor me’ challenge for the reader to give this mystic doctrine or meditation a try. I admit I've never heard of this before, however I'm going to accept your challenge and give it a try.

130 Personalities you say, it seems feasible I wonder if I've got more than one.
There are many philosophies that say that our current life is only one test in the grand scheme of things, only one part in the big play.

A well written and powerful article describing this process. A good work that has been a delight to read.


WindSpirit3 thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write on!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Deano Sharples I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Worker's Christmas Carol" Open in new Window. by Deano Sharples

Clarity:A good title for this Scrooge Carol.

Writing style:Holiday folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Ghost* Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Ghost*Nice structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? *Ghost*Good dialog appropriate for it's speaker.

My favorite line:---Bob started to feel the fear creeping up to his chest as the sounds had reached the peak of their volume.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:‘Helping those in greed.’ I think that is actually my favorite line. A nice opening that introduces this modern day Union workers nightmare Christmas Carol. A well told and realistic version of how big business treats its loyal employees the majority of the time.
I am glad Bob got to buy that turkey.
A delightful and entertaining modern day union Christmas Story. Bob becomes a better man after the visit from the ghosts of Past present and future.


Deano Sharples thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Ghost**Ghost**Penw* Write On!

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Joseph
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Review of The Ghost Story  Open in new Window.
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My impressions of the story: "The Ghost Story" Open in new Window. by Jeffrey Meyer

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A 300 word Flash fiction tale about tricks ghosting candy. (A typo, I think I'll stick with it.)
It does seem like ghost stories and sleepovers go together. That's about all the ghost stories I remember ever hearing were at some sort of sleepover or campout.
A well written and entertaining flash fiction story that keeps this reader entertained well.


Jeffrey Meyer thank you for sharing your work.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Jeffhans I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Worst Jugglers Ever" Open in new Window. byJeffhans

Clarity:A nice title for this Panda Tale.

Writing style:Fantasy comedy drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*BlowFish* Only two are listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Smirk2*

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Panda*

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:An interesting yet a bit twisted Panda tale. The main character had it all figured out and got to eat all the Burgers and Shakes. I'm not sure about the jugglers. Delightful and entertaining short tale with a twist at the end.

Jeffhans thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Wand* *Penw* Write on!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Joey's Ready for the Giving I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"A Computer Repair Adventure" Open in new Window. by Joey's Ready for the Giving

Clarity:A good title for this cybor adventure.

Writing style:Fantasy sci-fi drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed? *Keyboard2* Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*BoxCheckR* Yes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Audio1* Good dialog.

My favorite line:---He pictured Hargrove’s rage, the company’s lawyers descending like sharks. But then he saw Rainey’s wings, heard her laugh in his mind, and the ache in his chest swelled.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Jake Has a real computer repair adventure when a glitch in his computer at work causes his 3D printer to merge with a super printer and eventually create his dream girl, Rainey.
A nice descriptive opening that helps the reader picture the scene bringing them into the story line right beside Jake.
A realistic workplace description with the boss demanding production for overtime.

Well laid out story that progresses at a steady entertaining pace.
A delightful and humorous ending with Jake and his dream girl Rainey.


Joey's Ready for the Giving thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*PenY* *Penw* Write on!

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Joseph
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Review of Becoming  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Emberly Gray I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Becoming " Open in new Window. by Emberly Gray

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:‘Becoming’ Is a well-worded and most delightful and entertaining free verse style poem with six four lines stanzas that blend together for a good overall flow. Focusing on one's search to find his true inner being, as to discover his serenity and define his path for the future.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:'Serenity is not a gift—
It’s earned in tears, in letting go.
It’s choosing you, again, again,
Until your spirit starts to glow.'

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can see with this entertaining poem.

Emberly Gray thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Emberly Gray I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Where The Silence Echoes " Open in new Window. by Emberly Gray

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded poem with deep emotions screaming out to grab the reader's attention. Focusing on the mindset of someone that has a child or close loved one who has gone lost or missing.
Indeed sudden changes to one's lifestyle in which they have grown accustomed to can be tragic to that person.
This well-worded poem hits deep with this reader.


Emberly Gray thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Nowhere Dreams  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "Nowhere Dreams" Open in new Window. by Jade Rigby

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:‘Nowhere Dreams’ Is a well worded and emotional poem focusing on the one that got away.
A free verse form poem with three six line stanzas and starting with a five line stanza that blend well together to add to the realistic flow.
I feel that most people can look back down life's pathway at certain circumstances and often wonder what if and why.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see with this delightful poem.

Jade Rigby thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Saviour  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again Vicious I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"Saviour" Open in new Window. by Vicious

Clarity:Nice title.

Writing style: Inspirational folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*RainbowR* Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*RainbowR*Yes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? *RainbowR*Yes.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A pleasant folk tale type story that has a nice consistent flow. Well told with good descriptions that paint the scene for the reader.
I assume the bolded words were for a prompt.


Vicious thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider experimenting with a larger font and maybe a bit more line spacing.*Smile*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi again thereBdragons I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Too Old When You Stop" Open in new Window. by thereBdragons

Clarity:A nice title.

Writing style:Folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*DragonHead* Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*DragonHeadB* Indeed.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*DragonHeadR* Good dialog.

My favorite line:---“I’m too old for this,” Thelma said.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: “I’m too old for this,” ain't that the truth.*Shine* A well written and entertaining tale. I hope you won the contest.

thereBdragons thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Write on!*HighlighterP*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Vicious I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "THE MAN WHO TRIED TO TOUCH REALITY" Open in new Window. by Vicious

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A deep free verse philosophical poem focusing on 'the man who tried to touch reality'. I think I met him briefly once.

A unique and original poem for these days. I think it should be put right up there with the classics.
‘There once was a man who spent his whole life searching for truth’ I love this poem. Well worded and written, painting a strong picture for this reader that goes straight to heart.


Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of a traveler being swept up by the tides of the Sea of Time. The traveler is in constant pursuit of the elusive ‘truth’. He learns that ‘truth’ can never be caught, only caught up with from time to time.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with this classic poem.

Vicious thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Courting Death  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi LeJenD' I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Courting Death" Open in new Window. by LeJenD'

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A Creative idea for this well-worded poem with four octave free verse style stanzas each starting with ' Said Death '. Focusing on some of the ways human beings interpret the mystery of death. A philosophical view written in an entertaining fashion that gives this poem a delightful yet deep flow that most any reader can relate with.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with this philosophical work.

LeJenD' thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi tophatfiddle I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Bob Filled His Beer Glass from The...." Open in new Window. by tophatfiddle

Clarity:An interesting title.

Writing style:Sci-fi fantasy drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one is listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Nicely structured.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes the dialog does seem appropriate for it's speaker.

My favorite line:---“In the modern era, say since about 1800, we’ve managed to invent a large number of convenience items and labor-saving things, but almost none of them are really original thinking. Almost everything we’ve thought of had some precedent in nature for us to follow.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:An interesting tale about Bob and Andre sitting around drinking beer and discussing time travel, furthermore key elements such as fire, the wheel and animals. Andre's wife Rebecca joins at the end, seeming to be a little skeptical about Bob's time travel story. It would appear that both Bob and Andre have had a bit too much beer.

A nice opening line however you may consider trying to make it stronger to better catch the reader's attention from the beginning. Maybe consider making a stronger title to better describe the contents of the story. A bit more action especially toward the end, also may help keep the reader interested and guessing about the next event.


tophatfiddle thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Personally, when writing I try to avoid repetitive phrases especially those that come with said. Although it is most important to keep the dialogue specific to its speaker, I find that the text seems to flow better when replacing ‘said’ with as many similar words as possible such as replied, mumbled, explained, gestured, stated, remarked, mumbled, added, explained or suggested. This might just be my pet peeve but I find the text to flow better when not using the same word repetitively. Just my two cents worth.

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "Jailhouse Promises" Open in new Window. by Emberly Gray

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strongly worded 25 line poem, Five four line stanzas then ending with a five line stanza. A nice rhyming scheme that adds to the overall realistic flow.
‘Jailhouse Promises’ is a strong emotional poem focusing on an inmate's promises, as the title suggests. I found this poem to be original, entertaining and well worded.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can see.

Emberly Gray thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Sequence  Open in new Window.
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Hi Samm I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Sequence" Open in new Window. by Samm

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:An entertaining eight line two stanza poem. I really like the unique italicized font. Well worded in a unique style with a random rhyming scheme that adds to the realistic flow of this delightful poem. Short, sweet and delightful.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with the grammar, spelling or mechanics of this delightful work.

Samm thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "The struggle to remember" Open in new Window. by Moarzjasac

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded strong free verse style poem with six five line stanzas. Written from the point of view of a patient mentally preparing for a complicated surgery. A short and simple poem yet expresses it’s point very well. You can almost feel the emotion as you read this poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of an ancient world in the future. An older being of artificial intelligence lays in wait of being refurbished And reprogrammed by the new powers to be. For the first time, the being feels confused and deceived.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can see.

Moarzjasac thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi SeanBlonde I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "There's a Good Place to Sit" Open in new Window. by SeanBlonde

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A well worded and well laid out free verse style poem with 30 lines, focusing on personal biographical experience.
I like this creative and unique poem, this unique focus is like a breath of fresh air compared to all the lost love and romance poems that most people seem to write about.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with this delightful poem.

SeanBlonde thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of My Grandma Lulu  Open in new Window.
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Hi again Charlie I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "My Grandma Lulu" Open in new Window. by Charlie

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Your Grandma Lulu sounds like a remarkable lady made in the old fashioned way with unique character. A rare trait that has become hard to find these days. Indeed lots of times it's those fuzzy memories that are the most precious.

A well-worded strong and emotional poem that says a lot in a few words. "Grandma Lulu" has brought back memories to this reader. Grandma's are among the most precious gifts in the world, anyone who still has one should definitely enjoy and treasure every moment they have with them, while they can.


Charlie thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Hi Charlie I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Pranks: Staged vs Real" Open in new Window. by Charlie

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Well said. The miracle of writing, in these five short lines you have expressed what would take many a thousand words or more. Short, simple and to the point expressing your views very well. With the modern technology of today sometimes it is hard to distinguish between real and make believe. The puppet Masters are indeed masters of their art.



Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with this entertaining work.

Charlie thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Rules For Living  Open in new Window.
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Hi Louis Williams I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Rules For Living" Open in new Window. by Louis Williams

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written (Rules to remember and follow) philosophy with self help reminders learned from life lessons.

We all need an occasional reality check to remind ourselves of these rules from time to time. A great aid to help one keep focused especially during dramatic stressful and trying situations.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with this delightful work.*Party*

Louis Williams thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Tea Time With Dom  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Jeffrey Meyer I came across this work while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the tale: "Tea Time With Dom" Open in new Window. by Jeffrey Meyer

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written flash fiction story. Short and to the point just the way the modern reader likes things. I like the references to Ginseng tea .I have begun to experiment with ginseng in recent years.

A creative idea for this tale.

I think this is my favorite line:---' Three people peered at me from a faded Polaroid.'---


Jeffrey Meyer thank you for sharing your work.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Kare iauu Enga I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Tenth Street Shuffle" Open in new Window. by Kare iauu Enga

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:An entertaining free verse style poem with five four line stanzas, written in what seems to me to be like an advertisement mocking style. Kind of like what we see everyday in newspapers, brochures and such; ‘Go here.’ ‘Special on this.’ ‘Get this free with a hundred dollar order.’
A delightful well worded poem with an entertaining and unique flow. A creative idea for this entertaining poem.


Kare iauu Enga thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Token Jester I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Virtual Reality " Open in new Window. byToken Jester

Clarity: A nice title for this tale.

Writing style:Sci-fi fantasy drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Smile* Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Smile* Nice structure and format.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? *Smile* Good dialog that is appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---Just another day in the life of an amazing cat!---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written fantasy tale with creative characters that keep the reader guessing through the twist at the end. A nice start leading to events that keep the reader’s attention until an unpredictable end. I like this cat sci-fi story.

Token Jesterthank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write on!.

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Joseph
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Review of Perfection  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "Perfection" Open in new Window. byCharlie

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: Beauty is in the eye of the beholder. A philosophical poem that is well worded focusing a humans endless search for perfection.

A entertaining free verse form poem with five relatable stanzas that combine for a nice realistic flow.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with this delightful poem.

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Review of Shooting Star  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My impressions of 'Shooting Star': "Shooting Star" Open in new Window. by David C

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A nicely written simple and affectionate romance poem about two young kids looking at shooting stars while dreaming dreams about life to come.
Short and to the point with prompt(apparently) words in red. ‘Make a wish upon a star.’


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with the grammar, spelling or mechanics of this delightful tale.

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