Hello! I'm reviewing your lyrics, 'Life Isn't A Game Of Pretend,' which I found in the Read And Review feed.
Before I share my thoughts, I want to give you some context on my review style so you understand my ratings and feedback better.
I write for two different audiences: my friends and WDC.
* For my friends: I focus on writing poetry that's simple, easy to read, and quick to create for everyday enjoyment.
* For WDC: They look for the opposite – more polished work with strong rhyme, rhythm, and flow. This often takes a lot more time (months or even years), which isn't always ideal, but that's their preference.
Since I'm not great with grammar and punctuation, I tend to overlook them in my reviews. My feedback is mostly about how much I enjoyed reading your lyrics and how much I connected with them."
my thoughts after reading your lyrics
That's a powerful and passionate poem! It really conveys a sense of frustration with injustice and a deep desire for unity and kindness. You've clearly put a lot of thought into these themes.
It reminds me a bit of the struggles Temujin faced in his early life, dealing with a harsh world and learning about what truly holds value beyond material wealth.
What inspired you to write this poem?
so, there you go. I really enjoyed it and was hooked on the moment I read the first line to the very end.
Lately, I have been quite interested in writing Lyrics but that's gonna take sometime for sure.
Hi Sabr, I'm reviewing your poem "Why I Live" from my Read and Review feed. Before I dive in, I want to share a bit about my own approach to poetry, as it might help you understand my perspective better:
* I actually write for two different audiences. For my real-life friends, I write every day, and I keep those poems very simple and easy to understand, because that's what they enjoy.
* When I write for WDC, however, I try to polish my poems with good grammar, rhymes, rhythm, and flow. This takes a lot more time – sometimes months or even years! It's not always convenient, but I understand that's what this audience looks for.
* Personally, I stick to free verse poetry. It's what feels best for me; it lets me explore more ideas and feel free. I can't force myself to write if I feel constrained by rules.
So, with that in mind, my reviews and ratings are largely based on how much I enjoyed reading your poem and how well I could relate to it.
my first thoughts free reading your poem
This poem immediately strikes me as a raw and honest expression of confusion and doubt. The author seems to be navigating a difficult period, questioning big concepts like destiny versus choice. Lines like "Choices I have to make in life / says some / but aren't destinies already / down somewhere written" are incredibly relatable, reflecting a common human experience of grappling with internal struggles.
It's important to remember that these feelings often "come and go as we move on with our lives; it's part of who we are and what makes us stronger." The poem hints at this resilience with "hope -hope is keeping me going I guess / to be at peace / as I was always."
Writing Style & Potential
As someone who values simplicity and honesty in writing, I really appreciate the directness of this poem. There's no pretense; the author gets straight to the heart of their questions, making the piece feel authentic and personal. This simple approach connects strongly with the reader.
I also believe that imagery is a very important key point some new poets seem to be lacking. While this poem relies more on direct questions, there's untapped potential here to explore more vivid imagery.
Growth Path
I believe you need a little more time exploring your ideas to find out what styles is a good match for you. this can be done by writing some more and also by reading others poets poetry (I'd suggest you to look for free verse poetry)
I hope my review was helpful to you.
thank you and have a good day.
hello Tim, I'm reviewing "A Time For Kindness" because it was on my Read And Review feed.
my rating is purely based on how much I enjoyed reading and how I was able to relate myself to your poetry.
I cannot let myself be bothered about grammar, strict rhyme or whatever because I'm bad at it.
My Thoughts after reading your poem
Knowing this poem was a response to negative reviews, it really struck me as a resilient and hopeful message. It feels like a conscious choice to spread "civility, hope, and caring" even when faced with criticism. I enjoyed how it transforms a challenging situation into a powerful call for kindness and inner strength. It's a truly uplifting piece that resonates with the idea of rising above negativity.
A beautifully written master piece!
The emotions puring out of each verse was honest, touching and heartfelt and only keeps getting better as the poem goes on.
My favorite line was
"My best now never good enough, you can't get over little stuff"
Because that verse alone speaks volume of such personal tragedies we experience through out our lives as we move on.
Guess that's how life is
Thanks for writing and sharing this :)
My rating is purely based on how much I enjoyed reading this.
"As long we live, people's dream and their desire to be free will never die"
My initial thoughts after reading your poem.
Wonderful work you have published here and i couldn't be more happier knowing i got the opportunity to read it and was able to relate to it in my own ways.
My rating is purely based on how much i enjoyed reading it :)
Thank you for writing and sharing your work :)
I don't really know much about the writing format, my rating is based only on how much I enjoyed reading your poem.
Always a pleasure to read a heartfelt poetry :)
Thanks for the good read
Have a good day :)
"Let me shout out loud for once
So I may find a moment of peace"
My initial thoughts after reading your poem
Well done, keep up the good work
Have a good day :)
This is a wonderful poetry presentation about love, life and hope.
So glad I found this on my 'Read And Review' feed :)
Thank you for sharing this
Have a good day
I remember the first time when I heard the news, it was terrible!
Your poetry is exactly the words I had in mind;it's time for the neighbor countries to help out and help those in need..
Hope you're doing fine too...
I have been trying to return the favour to you since the day you reviewed my poetry but that seems kind of hard given how my work routine is.
I chose 'Happiness'to review because it got me curious.
I don't look into anyone's writing style and focus on the writing itself and how I am able to relate to it. So that rating is purely based on that alone, how much I enjoyed reading it :)
Overall, the message is quite clear and I agree with you. Happiness starts with you :) and that's how you are able to find happiness from those around you.
Normally, I am a person who likes to plan things ahead and don't really like it when things goes against it but when that happens, I say to myself
"No worries mate, time to improvise and see how it goes". Somehow, doing this helps me to get through that.
"ALONE but not LONELY"
This line really caught me off guard.
You know? There was a time when I used to say
"I am lonely but I am never alone"
I was in a pretty dark place back then...
"Life is full of adventure anf meaning"
This is the only line that needs correction, seems like it missed that.
Definitely coming back to read more of your work.
Happy writings
Bless you :) :)
Good Evening,
I am reviewing "Haunting Memories" because it appeared into my Read & Review feed.
My rating is purely based on how much I enjoyed your poetry, since I really don't bother about the style.
This is a well written Poem with indeed, great sadness into it..
When I was reading this, I was reminded of a childhood friend of mine who passed away with a similar incident. He was so full of energy, life and so many dreams. He used to tell me about the things he wished to do when he grew up.
And one day, out of nowhere, I was given the haunting news of his sudden departure...
Though he maybe gone, I believe he's in a better place now.
Thank you for sharing this.
You never know what you write could have such a big impact to that one reader who just randomly happens read it. That is the true art of poetry..
Though we may lose some, there are those who remains for us and we have to be better for them.
Good Evening,
I am reviewing 'Military Service' because it appeared into my Read & Review feed.
When I was about 14/15 years old, my father would take me to fishing trips and would tell me about the stories my grandfather had passed on him.
My father worked in the military for 13 years (I would never understand how he was able to do that for that long).
Anyway, the stories he told me was very exciting for me and inspired me to join the army as well.
Although it turned out somewhat the exact opposite for me,I still remember his stories.
Seems like their time in the military was totally different from the time I joined around.
But one thing you are absolutely right is that it really is a family tradition to join military in the war time:)
Hello Jacky
I am reviewing 'Rocky' because it was in my 'Read And Review' feed.
Please remember that I give my ratings based on how much I love reading poetry, and don't not based on other things such as rhyme or styles.
I loved how plainly this is written and easily went through it without any distractions. Liked the ending too :)
Thank you for sharing.
Hello Wordsmitty, I am reviewing
Mary had a bunch of littles
Because it was in my 'Read and Review' feed.
I loved reading it from the first line to the last, its a very decent and innocent, a perfect one for me to show my 8 year old son.
Thank you for the great read :)
Also thank you for the link, I have been needing something like that for a while now.
I really like dark theme you applied in this poem and it's all true at the same time.
We could never move on unless we embrace the darkness within
Wisdom is the key to move on
This remind me when i went back to my home land in 2015
I by passed my friends homes, even my grand father's home and didn't even knew it!
All had changed...
One thing i noticed is that almost all the younger kids were a bit... chubby...
Though i really didn't wanted to believe that, less than 12 hours i arrived, after talking a walk around the neighbourhood
I knew i was right all along.
No more football fields or the field we used to play other sports, all gone.
Only made me feel like not wanting to go back, but you know how it goes.
You can never really hate your homeland as long as you remember all the good memories of your golden childhood.
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