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Review by Fyn-dragon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really liked this, more could be clearly seen! Using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter. ~fyn
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Forms; the bane of my existence! Kudos to you for trying (and succeeding!!!) something new! I'm using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter!~fyn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
WOW! An epic of excellent lines and fresh perspectives!

Just an example--
a tangled spider’s web of wanted emotions, a
heart ensnared, this soul you deftly captured

and

No heart-warming tales from softened chairs, cold calls of valour’s salvation
Only thoughts of abandonment remain in my keep, those
Missing gears and sheared cogs, that fog life’s memories


Finely crafted! I'm using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter. ~fyn
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Review of The Golden Mare  Open in new Window.
Review by Fyn-dragon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Not only did you fulfill the prompt idea exceptionally, but did it in a difficult form to do well to boot! Took me through a day, a glorious ride, in such a way as to hear, see, smell and feel. Bravo!
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Review of The Atlas of Soul  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow. Some truly excellent lines, fresh perspectives, and descriptions. I love stumbling across new word combinations I haven't encountered before. This piece made me smile. A big thing!

Your speaking of spring and word choices like betal nuts, figs, and prayer bells tell me we are a world away from each other, and yet, I felt invited into your world! Invited in to share your vision, and to agree with the sentiments.
Well crafted! And this review request is answered, not lost in shuffling leaves falling from ancient oaks to line the paths. Indeed, I found some precious acorns along the way! ~fyn
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Enjoyed this! Some truly excellent descriptions! Like: driven by an engine that roared like a lion with a hairball and --> George didn’t thank his son for his hard work. He didn’t pat him on the back for a job well done. He didn’t say a word. A half smile spoke volumes.

This line carries volumes!--->George, ever the soldier, moved ever forward.

Excellent storytelling here!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Totally enjoyed this! Numerous levels.
No errors, nothing to mess with,
just appreciations of language use--
One example - his words smooth as river stones<--great analogy!
More, there are layers, and nuances and depth.
Bueyond all this, it is in the storytelling this piece rises to great levels.
The repetition of 'melody most recalled, but few remembered.' Zings, wraps and nails the whole piece.

I'm using this as an editor's pick in my For Authors Newsletter this week. ~fyn
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Review by Fyn-dragon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Reading this is a lot like wrapping one's self in a cozy warm blanket in front of the fire and falling into the story. I commend your talent with rhyme and meter as this just dances along in the very best of ways! REALLY well written! ~fyn
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Review by Fyn-dragon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh I enjoyed this!
My favorite part is
I see a small piece of my heart
that sings when you look at me
that laughs when my finger is skimmed
by your nose
or held by your piglet pink paws
or when my cheeks are kissed
by those wild, whiskey whiskers


Using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter! ~fyn
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Review of Seasonal Changes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I truly enjoyed this poem! 'Dandelion dreams are carried on the wind' - a super line! I thought this was very well crafted and executed. I'm using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter. ~fyn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Loved this - especially the lines:
The humans left as dusk descended,
Reviewing photos, quite content.
Unaware the forest parliament
Had found them guilty of contempt.


I'm using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter. ~fyn
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Review of Ind'n Grandpa  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
So, so, so good! Squirtles! Love it! My Uncle Hump had a 'snamonk'- totally get it! Love the respect and the value you give your grandfather.
I'm using this in the week's Poetry Newsletter. ~fyn
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Review by Fyn-dragon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter. You'll see why!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh my! Love this!!! I can so imagine it...I'll be 96 if I make it another 25 years, but if I'm still here, I will absolutely still be a member!!!

Using this in this week's For Authors Newsy! ~fyn
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Review by Fyn-dragon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh my, yes. So, so good! I thoroughly enjoyed this from start to finish! I'm using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter! ~fyn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good thoughts and conclusions! One suggestion, if I may. Edit this, highlight all of it and change the font size to 3.5. This will make it SO MUCH easier for those of us with older eyes to read!!!!!

I'm using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter. ~fyn
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Review of Wednesday Night  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ahhh...this bring memories flickering out of the past and into the now! I'm using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter! ~fyn
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Review by Fyn-dragon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Ahhhh...the great 'what if?' What if, indeed! I'm 71. Took me a long time to learn to be me. Unapologetically, me. Be you. It is what you'll be best at!
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Review of meet me someday  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the picture this paints in my mind! Short poem but quite eloquent!

Welcome to writing.com! ~fyn
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Review by Fyn-dragon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow. This is a really excellent insight and a good poem to boot!

The lines:

but tomorrow is a country
i can never seem to reach,
and healing is a language
i was never taught to speak.


cut deep. And sad. And they make one want to reach out if only to not say a word, but just offer a quiet hug.

~fyn
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Review of Wither  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh! I REALLY like this. I love how you play with words. Well crafted!

And, my original reason for the review, is Welcome to Writing.com! I am really looking forward to reading more of your work! ~fyn
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Review of puzzle pieces  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I liked this. The song and dance we put our brains through while writing is both joy and, at times, misery! And yet, as writers we must join in the dance!

Keep writing!~fyn
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Review by Fyn-dragon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome to Writing.com!

This is an excellent poem, especially the ending stanza. More specifically, the lines

where the umbilical cord is breaking,
where mother is always waiting,
for the day,
her son will return, from lands far and away,


This poem has a lot to 'unpack' (so to speak) and is layered and nuanced. It is one of the ones that invites, almost demands (!!) a second, third, and fourth reading! Go you!

~fyn
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Review of Red Shoes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Whew! Legs are tired! LOL.

Welcome to Writing.com :)

Loved this poem. Especially ---> Toulouse swirls ink with absinthe’s fire <---this!
Super image!

I also particularly liked
She stumbles through the gypsy streets,
where riddles churn and laughter cheats.
Crooked rhymes and chameleons bright
mock the day and haunt the night.


~fyn
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Review of The Muses  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh my, yes! You've nailed it! Smelling noises, seeing sound. Two of the simplest but it is just the tip of the iceberg in this poem! Well done! ~fyn
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