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Review of On the Precipice  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Travis Blake

My name is Ken, and I clicked on Read & Review today. Guess what popped up? 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "On the Precipice" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
What a great tale. 😀 They say you can write poetry about anything. I'm a believer now. *Laugh*

This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. It's important to keep the flow and your choice of line breaks felt disruptive and left me hanging a bit.

Overall, however, I really enjoyed this. Really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* A very entertaining read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Awareness  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Don Two

It's only me, Ken. I clicked on Read & Review and look what popped up from some long-forgotten corner of your port! *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Awareness" Open in new Window.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
The insights we stumble upon in our everyday lives. Nicely detailed without being distracting. An enjoyable journey.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a journey of memory. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Awareness." Open-ended and eye-catching. 😄 This should get a reader's attention. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Great word choice! Your descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing at the start and felt it was very prose-like. The final stanza, however, was beautifully written and I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very enjoyable read, and I appreciate you sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review of Fishful Thinking  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jeff is Gru in #2343485

It's me, Ken. I clicked on Read & Review and look what popped up. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Fishful Thinking" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A bit stand-alone without context. 😀 Good form and the link helped. I thought you were heading for the ending, "Her plan to make it a main dish." 🤣 The rhymes were clean and really let the story unfold with any awkward moments or breaks. Really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very fun read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of I remember  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jim

My name is Ken. I found this through Read & Review. Just lucky, I guess. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "I remember" Open in new Window.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A moving tribute to your (I'm assuming) mother and a strong statement of devotion to the values she stood for.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a bittersweet memory. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "I Remember." You left little doubt about what this poem was about. Open-ended, it should get the reader's attention. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I had to smile at "Traditional Free Verse." I guess it's been around long enough for variations to creep in so there's now a traditional form. Still, adding something like "I found an old photo..." would add to its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Good word choice! Your descriptive words are used to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. Your use of vignettes of her life connected together a full story. Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

I would recommend that you add {size:4} at the start. This will make the font bigger, fill the page more by reducing the white space, and help us old folk read it easier.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very moving read. I personally found it touching and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review of Ancestral Home  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi LeJenD'

It's me, Ken, and I clicked on Read & Review. Guess what popped up? *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Ancestral Home" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
A touch of nostalgia, a longing for home, a country western song. *BigSmile* You chose descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* While I felt this was a good read that many will immediately shake their heads in unison with, it seemed dated and a bit "off the shelf." Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Looking back  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sumojo

It's me, Ken. I clicked on Read & Review, and this little gem from a few years ago popped up. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Looking back" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A moving tale of looking back over a lifetime, recounting choices, and finding peace.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your beliefs. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Looking Back." You left little doubt about what this poem was about. 😄 If this doesn't get the reader's attention, then I don't know what will. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Great word choice! Your descriptive words build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings, and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in rhyme, although the structure was close to free verse. I didn't mind the varying meter because the story was well told. I noticed a few lines used internal rhyme which broke the flow a bit since they also included the rhyme for the next line. Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very moving read. I personally found it touching and I really enjoyed it. Congratulations on placing! It is well deserved. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication, and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Joseph

It's me, Ken, and when I clicked on Read & Review, looked what popped up. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Yesterday's Rainbow" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
As a fellow nature lover, I could identify with the feelings you expressed. 😀 This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* An enjoyable read with a lesson. Take a moment and embrace the beauty that surrounds us. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Jen's Words  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Lou-Here By His Grace

It's me, Ken, and I hit the Read & Review link. Look what arose from the depth of your port! 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Jen's Words" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

Perhaps a twist on the old "Asking for a friend" ploy? 😀 OK. That's just me being silly. I enjoyed this integration of free verse and structured poetry. I thought your approach was really interesting and well done. The ending was open ended and a bit ambiguous about YOUR feelings as opposed to your friends. I felt a little unsatisfied and it seemed there was more to come.

I would (assuming you haven't already done so in the intervening years) add {size:4} at the start to help us old folk read your work. I will often pass up writing with lots of fine print on a crowded page.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* An introspective read but I'm left with the question "Whose insight?" Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me ?today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken.


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi dogpack saving 4premium+

It's me, Ken, and I clicked on Read & Review. Look what was resurrected from some forgotten corner of your port! 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "God's Coloring Book" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I really enjoy nature poetry. 😀 The rhymes were clean and really let the story unfold with any awkward moments or breaks. The meter, however, seems more free verse than rhyme. It makes reading this feel very awkward. Kudos for your observations and interpretation.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enlightening read with a lesson many will immediately shake our heads in agreement with. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jeffrey Meyer

It's me, Ken, and I clicked on Read & Review hoping not to be disappointed. Look what popped up! 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "A Lady We Used to Know" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Being totally apolitical myself... *Rolling* OK - I appreciate your note but I'm old and don't have to be nice anymore. No, I don't respect everyone's beliefs and politics. Dems? Yes. Republicans? Yes. Trumpers? NFW. 🤣 I know, this isn't a rant, it's a review. Let's get on with it.

Great title! It captures the essence of the poem and will surely garner some curious looks. The poem is really well done, tracking the desensitization and devolution of our nation through this one event.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* An excellent read that all should shake their heads in unison with. Now, if we can just get them to actually DO something... Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of The question  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Jim,

It's me, Ken. You know, the guy you've been pestering with reviews lately. *Laugh* I clicked on Read & Review and look what popped up. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "The question" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A poem of hidden desire; random thoughts captured in a kaleidoscope of images.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a memory viewed through the lens of time. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart, and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "The question." A bit enigmatic but inviting. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a line about the form but I think you could have saved that for notes at the bottom. I was looking for context to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Simple word choice, clear and to the point. Your words build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem. Your proclivity for en dashes was a bit distracting and you shifted the POV so the use of only "you" was a bit confusing, at times meaning the object of your desire and other times referring to yourself. Consider your choice of pronouns. *BigSmile*

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in a variation of free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the thread of poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

I'll admit, I've never heard of a spinal poem. Obviously, a hidden message resides within and drives the form's structure. From my quick review of online sources, I can see where this began but it seems the hidden message is the focus rather than the emotional content which I felt limited the flow.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* An interesting read. I personally found the poem itself was interesting, and the sense of angst you portrayed was an emotion that most will connect with. The hidden part was too obscure and left me wondering what is this thing you do that would drive her away? Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi VictoriaMcCullough

It's me, Ken, and I decided to click on Read & Review today. Guess what was resurrected from some long-forgotten corner of your port? 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Taken From Haiku In The Wilderness 1" Open in new Window..
✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Rose thorns. OK, I get the images and the meanings. 😀 I think your Haiku does justice to the form. Syllable counts, lines, nature focus. I thought the "insight" was a bit weak but nonetheless, it highlighted your aha moment. In total, you let the story unfold with any awkward moments or breaks. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* Congratulations on the win! A very good read that will cause reader's to contemplate this moment. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim Chiu

It's me, Ken, and I decided to click on Read & Review today. Look what was resurrected from some lost corner of your port. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "My Vegas Vacation - Surprisingly Cheap" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
They (whoever they are 😀) say that poets expose a part of their soul with each write. You seem bound by logic. *Laugh* You've taken a small section of your life and made it interesting and engaging. The rhymes were clean and really let the story unfold without any awkward moments or breaks. Really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A fun read with a lesson for risk takers. Unfortunately, I'm probably not going to learn. *Rolling* Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Charity Marie - <3

It's me, Ken, and I clicked on Read & Review and look what popped up. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Charity Marie's WDC Will" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I've never done a review of a last will and testament! 😀 It actually makes a lot of sense although since I'm at the age you project for your demise it's a bit depressing. 🤣 I think you covered all the bases and, from your rationale, appeared "of sound mind" anyway. Really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A thought provoking read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Homeward Bound  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lou-Here By His Grace

It's me, Ken. I clicked on Read & Review, and look what was resurrected from some long-forgotten corner of your port. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Homeward Bound" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
They (whoever that may be 😀) say you can't go back. They are wrong. I have a true affinity for this type of writing. 🤣 There's a melancholy that touches most readers and will spark instant recognition. Really well done.

This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A touching read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Photo Op  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Don Two

It's just me, Ken, and I clicked on Read & Review. Look what was resurrected from some lost corner of your port. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Photo Op" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
OK, I'm a sucker for "everyday poetry." 😀 It's with the mundane that poets turn coal into diamonds. This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt this was very prose-like... until you relaxed and brought in the poetry magic. As Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this. It upgraded the read and really let the story unfold without any awkward moments or breaks. Really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very satisfying read that many will immediately shake their heads in unison with. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Alchemy  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ra M

My name is Ken. I dropped by Read & Review and guess what popped up? *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Alchemy" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A tale (or memory) of physical bliss that words have captured in a soaring saga of intimacy.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your love. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Alchemy." A bit open-ended, with many meanings about what this poem could be about. 😄 It will attract many readers' attention. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem but I feel you shortchanged yourself. Like your night of passion, more is better than less.
While I am no prude, due to the subject matter, I would encourage you to up the rating to at least ASR.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Great word choice! Your descriptive words were used to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this included the flow that poetry has and kept it from being too prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very enjoyable read. I really liked some of the imagery and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi C. Evil

My name is Ken and I decided to check out the Read & Review. Look what popped up! 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "One Day We'll Meet at the Cabin" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
What a sad tale. Having gone through loss, I could feel the regret and sadness of your vignette and could immediately identify with your character. Nice descriptive words set the stage and emphasized the feeling of loneliness. Really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A moving read. I felt this wasn't quite complete, however. Consider extending the story to include scattering the ashes and tie into the leaves floating on the water. Both are endings of a season. With the father's ending, Arlo begins. Just some random thoughts. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Naomi

It's me, Ken, and I decided to click on Read & Review. Guess what popped up? 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "The Beauty Of Laughter" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I'll be honest. Poetry? No problem. Short Story? No problem. Biographical? Now you're going to make me think. *Rolling* How do you critique a part of someone's life? Still, I will try.

I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your beliefs and the love you feel for life. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

I totally agree with you.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enlightening read with a lesson that most will immediately shake their heads in unison with. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jeffrey Meyer

It's me, Ken, and I decided to check out the Read & Review. Look what popped up. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "The Forest for the Trees" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Two sides of the same coin. 😀 I loved the banter and could immediately identify with your characters. You let the ambiguity of the speakers hide who was actually talking which set up the ending nicely. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very fun read although the brevity of the tale made it feel less story and more vignette. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Love is not  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Mouser

My name is Ken. I dropped by the Read & Review and this popped up. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Love is not" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
My first thought was: "When you have eliminated the impossible, whatever remains, however improbable, must be the truth." Sherlock Holmes Your truth seems to be that love is a game token.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your beliefs about the nature of love. It is unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Love is not." You left little doubt about what this poem was about. 😄 If this doesn't get the reader's attention, then I don't know what will. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line, but a few more words would add meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Your descriptive words are used to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel your emotions in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
It's probably just me but I personally found it somewhat empty of revelations. I really think that should you choose to revisit this (it's been a while since you wrote it) that there's real insights you could add to make this more satisfying to the reader. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Beck Firing back up!

My name is Ken and I decided to click on Read & Review today. Guess what popped up? 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "St. Patrick's Day Shenanigans" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
You left little doubt about what this poem was about. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I thought your extra info fell short unless you're getting paid to advertise for the Bard's Hall Contest. *Rolling* Great contest but I'd rather see you focus on your work.

I see you took the Acrostic challenge to the next level by adding rhyme... mostly. It worked although the final line did seem to come out of nowhere. I was also a bit confused about the Scots and Dutchmen sneaking into an Irish-focused poem.

Just for presentation purposes, I have two suggestions: Add {size:4} at the beginning to increase the font size and make it easier to read. Try bolding the first letter of each line which will make the Acrostic more self-evident especially when you're using such a faint color.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star*A fun read that captures the spirit of the day. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Why Do I Write  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Mary Ann MCPhedran

It's me, Ken, and I decided to check out the Read & Review forum; guess what popped up? 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Why Do I Write" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A little disappointing. 😀 I read this hoping to understand why you write. You still haven't told me. You said you do. (That's the what.) You said you "write from your heart." (That's the how.) Nothing about why. Is it just to put words on paper and collect them into a book?

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star* An interesting read but, in the end, disappointing. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Universal Laws  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi PATRICIA A. MANIACI

My name is Ken. This popped up on Read and Review. Maybe it was karmic. *BigSmile* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Universal Laws" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
And here I was, looking for a treatise involving advanced mathematics explaining the fundamental workings of the universe, when instead I found a presentation on hermetic principles.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your beliefs. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Universal Laws." I found this a little ambiguous since many have differing views on what is Universal and what is Law. That ambiguity may be enough to attract a few readers but primarily it will get eyes from those already familiar with the topic and I doubt that it's the target audience you were looking for. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I would certainly encourage you to add a few words other than it was an entry. Perhaps something like "The laws about mastering your life with love and joy."

🔹 Grammar/Wording - I think your word choice is limited since the concepts are prescribed. Your transition words are primarily to connect one law to another in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to paint the story of your poem. A few tiny errors jumped out. The opening line "wont" should be won't. The line, "Masculine & feminine, yin and yang, the balance were always needing." I think you meant "we're."

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in a loose free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel your emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very enlightening read. (No pun intended *Laugh*) I personally found it educational which I appreciate. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review of So Glued!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim Chiu,

My name is Ken. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "So Glued!" Open in new Window. which I came across in Read and Review.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A bit of fun. We all have those half-used bottles and tubes lying around. I guess, for you, their image stuck in your mind. *FacePalm*

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I love writing about the mundane and I'm happy to see that you do to. Finding inspiration in the ordinary is a gift and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "So Glued!" You left little doubt about what this poem was about. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Aimed at children, your word choice was simple without abandoning descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to build pictures and each word seemed well-chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - You used standard quatrains in aabb patterns of rhyme. The meter was a bit inconsistent but it flowed well. I recognized Crazy Glue and Elmers but since this was geared for kids, I thought that glue sticks - a schoolhouse standard - were a glaring omission.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A fun read. I personally found it memory-filled and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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