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I look for the arc of the story, movement, tone, and most of all, subtext.
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Having a very open mind.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, I reviewed your piece because you requested me. I think it was because, the reviewer not being a fan of science fiction, but having an open mind, made the reviewee look for something more than the average comment

1. That average comment might be, well written, but it's hard to tell who's really is the winner in the story, or who's the loser.

2. Utopia literally shoved down the throats of people of the pyramid in the form of mood altering pills. Rebellion in teenage years has nothing to do with the individual's understanding of his future. As powerful as the administration to assign different pills, they are powerless against the what's creeping in the skull of the person kicked into obedience. It also describes how the growing tolerance of a drug can change the whole story, even if Utopia had not planned that in her provisions.

3. High school, re worked, the fisherwoman gets burned because she uses a certain face to wrap fish up with, and the loyalists, set fire to her skirt, (a scene from another novel).

4. The history class seems to make sense of the world now, since it's looking backwards, and only backwards, and the pills do the rest to change any future.


5. I do like the writing, it's clear

6. I think our own society is sick enough.

7. I think Jackson wins in the end.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thanks for even thinking of a Brainstorming Group of Mental Illness. I call it progress. A lot of people are not even aware of what makes a person ill in the head. Writers are so close to it, because it's the only place to find a kind of insight.
We all have a place to go now.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I sent the link for a blog post, not my blog

My Blog # is 2082772

I hope this clears things up, JClare
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Rated: E | (5.0)
thanks for having this on Writer's.com
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, I reviewed your piece because I'm actively involved in sexual and domestic abuse in writing

1. You should search for groups looking for this kind of work, it would be very appreciated.

2. The question exist, why do men say they love you (or even a woman), and then use you as their garbage pail. Answer, no one can figure it out.

3. Great rhyme and rhythm,it helps the reader to get through the person's pain they may not want to look at.

4. Into the very heart of violence, and "I blame you".

5. This reader tries to wonder what will be said about the bruises when asked.

6. Even tone, the person left the relationship, and even tone to relationships is not easy

7. Over all, open to the pain, eyes opening to leave, and she leaves to count the scars, and know it wasn't her fault, it was just an excuse to beat the person up.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, I reviewed your piece because the name was intriguing

1. I think you are a very good writer, and the story works in its genre way, but maybe since I do not read genre, I'm not the best to see the best

2. Plot, a little confusing, but good

3. I'm confused by the entrance of all the different characters. Where they in the earlier part?

4. Everyone has a unique name, and that's cool and original.

5. Leads the reader a little astray - but is that the literary part of it?

6. This needs some more clarification

7. It's over written, but that's my opinion, and you can take that with a grain of salt. My advice is to substitute plainer language in the smaller places. If you varied the word tension (I feel you apply the words, or over writing, Everywhere), it would more readable and easier to appreciate the colorful story going on.


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