Great poem (I'm not very poetic, but I like this). Though, the fourth stanza needs a comma after the word "shame." And for the fourth to last stanza (is that what they are called?), the "then" might need to be changed to "than." Your choice, though, so do whatever you want to. Great poem though!
I have to say, this is a great start! I love how there is some segregation added! It gives some feeling of passion for the main character. There could be some added dialogue between characters to express this kind of separation between these half-breeds and the full-blooded dwarfs.
I like this, this creates a metaphorical bridge to cross the gap of people who are afraid to show themselves, and those who are not afraid. It sounds a bit like an autobiography to me, so I started to wonder if this was on purpose. If it was, the idea is great, and the story is great. As a "furry" or whatever they call the group nowadays, I approve.
I think this is a good short story. I think it would be great to see this as some children's book or something. It could teach them a lot, with how they learn.
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