It was a breath of fresh air to read something somewhat akin to my own mind. Which in itself, is filled with slight bias of ego. Not many share their insights so unfiltered and when they do, in my experience, it is often those who have been touched with neurodivergence or have experienced deep hardships. Hardship, something we all know during the course of our live, both is and isnt the same for everyone. Which in itself could also be summed up to life itself ebbings and flowing with its cycles, much like your thoughts and insights within your essay. Not that I am inherently social. But, in the spirit of seeing the world unfiltered and honest, taking a step into other possible perceptions through never ending curiosity can also promote your autonomy and insight. Even perhaps sparking evermore life within your campfire sparked from inspirations of old.
The imagery of living dead crawling after you reaches my mind when I read this. I can picture and feel the hopeless resolve in which you are chained to him, that your love, though unconditional comes with a heavy price. Is this the feeling you were trying to illicit? Either way, it is beautiful. I think perhaps seperating the poem into more than one stanza *if you did already, sorry Im new here* it would help give you more room to expand upon him and the emotions his section carries. So linking more emotion to his section. And then for your emotional section adding perhaps details and descriptions for what you heart might look like or what you are doing in the space as he is crawling. Wonderful job! I really do love this. I hope this helps and finds you well. Keep going! Really solid foundation
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