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Review by Sawyer Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I love the sound of this piece! However, there are a few places where you loose your flow. That is not a huge hindrance, but you have done a lot to work to stumble once or twice.

You have several misuses of ";"
e.g.: "and not just any nuts; but the Walnuts of the Tree"
You use commas with conjunction (and, but, or). Semicolons join two complete sentences. "but the walnuts of the tree" is a fragment not a sentence.

"There was a prize to pay" perhaps price would sound cleaner? It would flow a bit better.


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Review by Sawyer Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
This part:
I have been instructed on what is acceptable and what is not done;
I have been told what I should accomplish and how I should have fun;

Deviates from your "sound". Keep with your flow! There are some places where it is appropriate but when you deviate it breaks it up.

Overall good piece!


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Review by Sawyer Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I d really love this piece, which is rare for me. I am not into poetry...like at all. Haha
I love how the farther you go into the poem the more you get an idea of what the narrator is. My first thought was a car and then I realized it was a bike.
The detail is amazing. I feel like I can see the bike.

If you have some time, I have a "story"/"slam poetry"/unknown piece called One More on my page.

I am having an issue with it. It was originally a story, but then a friend reformatted it to look like a poem, claiming that it was more like slam poetry. If you could give it a look over and help me from a poets perspective that would be amazing.
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