A truly wonderful poem! It tickles the brain in just the right way if you understand what I mean. It‘s neatly organized, the rhyming scheme the same except for the last two verses, which gives them more weight as you talk about a void that no one is familiar with that way.
It reminds me of how silence seems to make the seconds longer and the minutes stretch. That‘s „The quiet“ you talk about for me. Andwhile I may never know what exactly was on your mind as you wrote this, I can say that what I as audience see is magnificent!
This is amazing! And yes, one does get the picture. Your vocabulary is wonderful and your words describe a scene that blooms in my mind with just a few lines. It’s great that you didn’t tell what the picture is about right at the beginning - it gave my silly and fantastical mind the opportunity to paint a picture on its own it could then compare with the solution you’ve given.
Once again, truly wondeful, glad to find a fellow poet!
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