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Rated: E | (3.0)
Great! I love the challenge you took. You definitely described water in an incredible way. I would experiment with line breaks and format to see if you can make the piece flow even better. Also, I would be interested what this poem would look like if you took out some of the words like "then" from the second line, "of" from the fourth. I would also try to keep the present consistent "turning dry streambeds into bouncing, babbling..."
Overall though, GREAT description!


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