there was a very real sense to your piece. the story felt incomplete, just a snippet indeed.
however there was some great emotion there along with some powerful subject matter
i would've liked to have read more of this. thanks for the work.
this felt like a love story but got kind of creepy is wound up... the repetition of that phrase didn't play as well with my senses at the end as it did at the beginning. but your tone was satisfying and the layout of your piece was great. using proper syllable counts for a rapport with the reader gave the piece a comforting feature. there was a lot of emotion displayed which is great. keep writing from the heart and great work will soon follow. keep up the great work.
This was great, and your voice was especially strong early on. I truly enjoyed the rhymes and how your content was delivered.
The line about our planet and finding ones that will be around longer really hit home. I've been thinking about things like that lately, and writing pieces with similar content. You outwrote me! Great work.
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