Love your poem. I like how it lifts you at the start, big and full of energy, then lands on something simple and true. The line about the snooze button really made me smile because it captures a relatable aspect of human nature. Thank you so much for sharing your work. Take care.
Wow! truly food for thought. Your poem really makes you think its loaded with questions that challenge our expectations. Momentum builds with each line, culminating the finale of the poem the tempted when nearing the edge line is a very powerful line. I love how the poem does not provide answers instead, it invites you to sit with the questions, which is what makes your poem a very powerful read. Made me really think. Thank you for sharing your work. Best regards.
Was just sipping on my morning coffee while reading through some poetry on this site. Your poem caught my attention. It carries so much weight, mixing sweetness with damage. I love how you start with honey as glue. It sets the tone right away. The armor part in the poem and all those years building walls, then one touch, one look one smile, and everything is exposed and open. You can feel the vulnerability and it makes the risk of love feel real in your poem.
I feel like the last lines are the heart of the poem. The please don't leave me, I want you to see my fragile skin, is absolutely brilliant. This is an outstanding read. Thank you so much for sharing it. Keep writing, and take care.
Wow, I could not read and not leave a review for this amazing write. Came across your read had to read a few times and I can say this is straight fire. Every line strikes with confidence and attitude. You can literally feel your voice loud and clear. Your writing reads like a song or rap. I might be wrong, also poetry.
The references are genius. It truly gives your writing a cinematic, tough edge. Every time I read it; it took me to different eras of pop culture. For instance, Like the line aint no stopping us now, that line made me play MC faden and Whitehead's song in my head. All the small references you made throughout your read took me through a roller coaster of recollections and tunes.
Honestly, you have a real gift here. Truthfully, I'm curious and I'd love to have a breakdown of your writing and the meaning behind your write. This is pure art. Thank you for sharing your work. Take care
Was sipping on my cofee this morning, reading poetry on this site and came across your read. The way your poem shows how change happens little by little, almost like an invisible force, until suddenly everything is different. The rhyme in your poem keeps it flowing smoothly almost like the days are slipping by without notice.
The ending of your poem truly strikes heavy in the chest. That line about being left alone to agonize overit makes the heart ache, because thats exactly what it feels like when the ones you love grow up and move on. What I like is how you managed to say so much with so little, this truly amazes me. The poem is short, but it still carries so much weight. You captured the passing of time, the growing up, heartbreak all in just a handful of lines. That’s not easy to do. I cant wait to read more of your work. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.
Your read seems to reflect it isn’t just about the spine—it’s about all the weight that the writer is carring alone. Your poem highlights how physical pain blends in with emotional neglect. HoW they learned to ignore what hurts because no one else would notice. The twisting, cracking, standing still there more than actions.Ways of coping, ways of surviving. The lines with your parents hits hard, showing why you’ve had to rely on yourself. It’s honest, pure and painfully real, and it makes the reader feel that heavy load right alongside your words. Thank you for sharing your work Truly enjoyed your read. Keep writing. Take care.
Wow, your read is so heart felt.Every line of hope and longing was deeply felt. You have the ability to make your readers feel every word. Can truly feel how much you miss him. The way you state you reach for signs, stare at the pictures, and hold onto his memory. Your love for your husband comes through every line, from his gray hair to hoping he saw the light. It’s heartbreaking, but such a beautiful read. You’re keeping him alive in your words, and that’s powerful.Thank you for sharing. Take care.
Just read your poem. And wanted to stop anf
D review. I love how you describe the weight of lies coiling inside, burning every time something touches them. The imagery you use is felt and real and it makes the reader feel that heavy, stuck energy of guilt and secrets. I think you captured that tension between hiding something and needing to let it go so well. Thanks for sharing your read. You made me stop, reflect, and really feel it. Some writers dont have this ability. Keep writing.
Ijust read your other poem.The Great Dying before this, and wow, you know how to grab a reader and make them feel everything. The Rejoicing Song is a whole other vibe its bright, alive, full of little things that hit deep. You capture emotion so well, whether it’s darkness or pure joy. This poem made me feel joyful. Like a beautiful melody. Loved both poem.Honestly, I had to come back to read more of your work. Truly shows your range.Thank you for sharing your read. Truly raw talent.
Wow, I gotta say, this poem hits hard. The imagery used in your poem left me in ah. It’s truly brutal and raw. Your read truly has the power to capture the readers attention. Feel like its all the things that are currently occuring in our posioned world. History does truly does repeat itself. Had been away from this site for awhile was browsing through poems and your read grabbed me immediately. So thank you for sharing your work. Take care.
What a raw read. In your poem, the speaker speaks about feeling nervous and overwhelmed by the noise and chaos around them. They try to escape these feelings by turning to music. The fast and loud beats of the music help them feel better and give them strength. The music, especially the powerful sound of Soundgarden, helps them shake off their anxiety and feel more hopeful. The speaker shows how music can be a powerful way to cope with tough emotions. The repeated phrase upbeat, uptempo, raw, pulse-pounding highlights how the tune energizes and lifts the mood. Soundgarden - Blow Up The Outside World, came to mind. Where it starts low. "Nothing seems to kill me, no matter how hard I try. Nothing is closing my eyes." The melody from low to high notes and instruments. Seems to Feed the writer. Each note each lyric is like an anxiolytic. While studying for my graduate degree. The world around me and anxiety for my research papers' due dates drove me wild. To help me write I would place headphones on my ears. Listened to Lana del Ray, Sound Garden, a system of the Down, and many other genres of music. Each song, lyrics, musical instruments. Would fuel my writing, relaxing me enough to see words. Music is powerful in many ways. Thank you, for sharing your work. I will be back to read more of your work.
Beautiful, your lyrical poem speaks so much beauty. To me, it talks about how different seasons pass by, with the beauty of nature like grass, flowers, and snow, but you feel that nothing in life is as beautiful as the person you love. Each season reminds them of this person, but no matter how beautiful the world around them is, it doesn't compare to the person you love. You walk around just witnessing the changes of the season and awakened by memories forgotten. Then along comes the snow wipes it away and back to black and numbness. Thank you so much for sharing your read. I honestly would love your interpretation of your work and word usage. Will be back to read more of your work.
Well yeah, now I'm super famished. Your write seems to be a lighthearted and conversational contemplation on a dish the writer had uncovered in the South, which mixes sweet and savory flavors. The writing style is colloquial, with the writer expressing their thoughts and views in a relaxed and relatable way.
The writer cites that they had never heard of this dish before coming to the South, and compares it to sweet tea, hinting that it may be a regional specialty. They voice curiousness and interest in trying the dish despite their initial reluctance, as they admit that it looks appetizing in the picture they found.
The writer mentions their own waffle maker and familiarity with frying chicken, implying that they may attempt to make the dish themselves. They communicate their preferences for fluffy waffles, maple syrup, and fried chicken thighs, adding a trace of humor with the mention of Banquet, a label known for frozen fried chicken.
The write furthermore contains personal cravings and hunger-inducing descriptions, adding to the relaxed and relatable tone of the write. The usage of casual language and the statement of being hungry adds to the colloquial and windy tone of the read.
Across the board, the passage can be classified as a personal reflection or conversational piece on a dish, penned in a casual and relatable fashion.
I am now extremely hungry, but I do prefer the breast. The delicious sweetness from the waffle and maple syrup truly does balance the tasty chicken flavor. Salivating now... and thank you for sharing your mouthwatering read with picture included. Best regards.
Wow, very well communicated, bravo! Back again to read more of your work, and again I am left in awe. The poem appears to be a critical commentary on a society that is oppressive, discriminatory, and hypocritical. The title itself implies that this is not the first time that such a government has existed, and it appears to imply that the present state of matters is a new iteration of an old problem.
The usage of ephemeral, supplementary sentences constructs a feeling of haste and underlines the stringency of the problem. The repetition of "Where" at the start of each stanza implies that these are all diverse elements of the same problem.
The writer concentrates on various ways in which society is oppressive, including the banning of books and the erasure of history, the demonization of people from different ethnical and cultural backgrounds, the suppression of non-heterosexual identities, the subjection of women and children, and the adulation of guns over health and wellbeing.
The poem underlines the hypocrisy of the society, which declares to be free and moral but in validity strips individuals of their independence and morals. The writer is not afraid to use powerful language, such as "villainize," "criminalize," and "demoralize," to push the verity that this institution is actively and deliberately harming its citizens.
All around, your write is a powerful censure of a society that prioritizes power and governance over empathy and liberty. It conforms as a forewarning against the perils of absolutism and the importance of staying vigilant against oppressive powers.
Very well worded as a healthcare provider that witnessed so much inequity amidst the covid19 pandemic. With the higher-ups shifting rules and regulations. Literature truly speaks volumes and the unethical history lays dormant in books collecting dust ready to be repeated again. A true wicket problem. It truly is time to tip the wink.
Thank you so much for sharing your powerful write. Read it over and over attempting to dissect every word this is truly unpretentious nourishment for thought. Will be back to read more of your exceptional work. Best regards
Wow!!! what an intense read. I kept thinking in my head what a bat-sh.. crazy guy, the character is. A perfect portrait of someone with a severe mental illness. You flawlessly utilized words to paint a vivid image in your reader's mind of the scenes taking place in this short story.
This write seems to be a dark and disturbing concise narrative about a man who visits a woman who he claims to be his girlfriend but who doesn't remember him. He admits that he hurt someone in the past and attempts to apologize to the woman for leaving her, but it shortly becomes clear that he has fooled himself into believing she is someone else.
He becomes increasingly violent and intimidating towards the woman, exposing a hunting knife he has brought with him as a "make-up present." The tale concludes on a cliffhanger, with the woman in danger and the reader left to speculate what happens next.
The short story explores themes of obsession, delusion, and violence. The character's delusions and unstable behavior are unsettling, and the way he appears to emanate pleasure from the fear he causes in the woman is chilling.
This short story is notable for its use of an unreliable narrator, as the reader is never quite sure what is real and imagined. The finale is remarkably effective in leaving the reader with a feeling of unease and suspense, as they are compelled to imagine the worst.
Thank you so much for sharing your read. This distinguished read constructs a suspenseful and unsettling narrative that trolls themes of infatuation, control, and manipulation. The story's twist ending, where the protagonist is unveiled to be a dangerous stalker who has mistaken his victim for somebody else, adds a chilling coating to the story's general message about the dangers of fixating on others and the importance of identifying warning signs of abusive behavior.
Wow, took me back to seventeen, oh how I wish for that time back. A good year when you are so brand new. What a wonderful read, made me smile, and made my heart happy. This read seems to be a personal narrative or a memoir-style piece? It is penned in a first-person's point of view and recites the writer's experiences and memories in a nostalgic and reflective fashion.
This powerful and nostalgic write prompts recollections of the writer's past, specifically their experiences at age seventeen. The wording is receptive and vivid, with the usage of similes and metaphors to depict the emotions and sensations connected with this time period. The repetition of the phrase "seventeen" highlights the importance to the writer and the way it is epitomized as a character that talks and sings, to the writer adds to the emotive significance of the piece.
Using precise details, such as the smell of a certain cologne or the taste of a particular candy, adds profoundness to the writer's memories and enables the reader to connect with their experiences. The references to shared experiences with a friend and the reflection of a "star spot" furthermore allude to a potent sense of community and a memorable place or moment that harbors significance for the writer.
Your write effectively reflects the ephemeral nature of time and the importance of cherishing our memories and relationships, even as we move on to new phases of life. The writer's regret over losing touch with their past selves and their yearning to reconnect with those memories and emotions is a cordial and ubiquitous theme.
Very well done. You have no idea how much I appreciate you sharing your nostalgic read. We forget at times, it's important to reflect. This world has changed so much. Read your writing a few times...I do have a question "Bellany was good to us." This particular phrase, was Bellany a car? Just couldn't quite seem to decrypt what that phrase meant. I had a car that was good to me, and her name was Rachel. So just wondering. Thank you for sharing your work. Best regards.
What a delightful read. I was instantly taken back to high school and the intense feelings that can arise when you are brand new, and you see your crush in the hallway. Your poem "Just a Hallway Crush" explores the emotions of infatuation with somebody who is basically a stranger. The orator notices the object of their affection in the hallway and is instantly drawn to them. The orator confesses that they don't know this individual and this individual doesn't know them. Despite this, the orator feels an intense draw to them and can't seem to dismiss it.
The vocabulary used in the poem is concise and to the point, reflecting the orator's inner battle between their fascination for this person and their thoughts that it might be far-fetched and may not come to fruition. The repetition of the phrase "just a hallway crush" highlights the orator's attempt to ignore their feelings, but also unveils the persistence of those emotions.
All around, your poem captures the intense emotions and conflicting thoughts that can come with having a crush on somebody who is essentially a stranger.
Very well done. Thank you for sharing your work. I look forward to reading more of your writing. Best regards.
What a lovely poem, made my heart happy. Read it a few times, over and over, trying to take in all the words used and the tranquility it brought over me. True skill when you have the ability to transfer a feeling to your readers. Well here goes... Your free verse concise poem, Curl Into Me arouses a sense of comfort and connection with another person. The orator invites someone to come closer, to be vulnerable, and share their story. The gentle and reassuring tone highlights the essence of being present and relishing the moment.
The beginning lines set the scene, as the orator eagerly opens their arms and invites the other person to stay. The imagery of curling in suggests a physical closeness and intimacy that is reassuring and comforting. The invitation seems to be open-ended, allowing the other person to choose how close they want to get.
The second stanza redirects the focus to the external world, as the orator encourages the other person to look outwards and count the ships as they pass. The imagery of the healing waves proposes a sense of renewal and rejuvenation that can be discovered in nature. This image is a reminder that, even in challenging times, there is still beauty and comfort to be seen.
The third stanza returns to the theme of intimacy, as the orator encourages the other person to lean back and whisper their story into patient ears. This is a moment of vulnerability and trust, as the orator creates a safe space for the other person to communicate their innermost thoughts and feelings.
The conclusive stanza acknowledges that all good things must come to an end, but underlines the importance of leaving a trace behind. The orator desires that even if the other person must go, they will leave an everlasting imprint or memory behind. Overall, Your poem trolls the importance of connection and vulnerability and the beauty that can be uncovered in even the simplest moments of closeness.
Truly a beautiful, heartfelt poem. It truly relaxed me. Delivers a captivating expression of empathy and compassion. Very well done. What a lovely write. Thank you so much for sharing. I look forward to reading more of your work. Best regards.
I'm back to read more of your work. Again I am in awe...your reads have the power to touch your readers. Interpretation after reading your work a few times...Well, here goes...Your writing seems to be a poem about love, loss, and memories. The orator appears to be addressing someone who has possibly passed away? or perhaps someone they have lost. Expressing their yearning to hold and console them again.
The poem underlines the force of memories to nurture and comfort us even after a loved one has gone away. The vocabulary utilized is gentle and touching, forming a sense of intimacy and tenderness. The poem also touches on the notion of time, implying that although the present moment may be challenging, there are always new opportunities and tomorrows to come. The general tone is nostalgic and reflective, with a compass on the enduring power of love.
Very well composed. As a healthcare provider that worked nights and missed so many holidays, I missed so much. Time flies, it truly does, but memories are gold. What a beautiful read. I can wait to read more of your writing. Thank you so much for sharing your work. I will be back to read more. Best regards.
As a healthcare provider that witnessed so much death amidst the covid19 pandemic's 1st and 2nd deadly waves your writing resonates and speaks volumes to my soul. Your writing appears to be a reflective and philosophical piece on the nature of death and the value of human bonds. It integrates personal reflection, introspection, and a message of hope and compassion.
It is a pure reflection on the nature of death and its emotive impact on those left behind. The writer concedes that there is no right time or perfect place to die and that it's a natural part of life. Nevertheless, despite this understanding, the writer also acknowledges the deep pain and fear that comes with losing a loved one.
The passage implies that our connections with others are what give our lives meaning and purpose and that we should treasure and expand upon these affinities day to day. The writer highlights the extent of love, compassion, and living in the present moment, as we never know when our time will come.
Across the board, the passage reminds its readers to value people in our lives now and make the most of our time, as death is an unavoidable part of human experience.
I truly enjoyed reading your reflective philosophical prose. Very well done, thanks for sharing. Best regards.
Had to read more of your work. What a beautiful poem! I was in awe after reading. The poem "Tiny White Puffs" utilizes imagery to illustrate the beauty of snowfall and the transient respite it provides from the stains of yesterday. The poem is concise, I want to say it's five lines because I badly want to mistake the comma for a period for some reason. Nevertheless, the poem effectively captures the emotions and sensations associated with snowfall.
The first two lines vividly display the snowflakes as tiny white puffs that collect on the ground. The usage of the word "puffs" and "collect" deliver the guise of lightness and proliferation. The third line analogizes the snow to clouds that have fallen down, underlining the beauty and rarity of this natural occurrence.
The fourth line phrases that the snow coats the ground thick and white, creating a clean and pristine blanket that hides the stains of yesterday. This forms a contrast between the purity of the snow and the imperfections of the past.
The final line of the poem joins the purity of the snow with the idea of innocence. The orator implies that, for a short moment, everyone can stand in the snow and pretend that they are as innocent as the virgin white snow. This may imply that the snow delivers a temporary escape from the grim realities of life and supplies a moment of peace and innocence.
Your poem "Tiny White Puffs" utilizes imagery and contrast to grasp the beauty and ephemeral nature of snowfall. The poem devises a sense of wonder and peace while also acknowledging the imperfections of the past. The usage of imagery and short lines forms a simple and memorable poem that transmits a powerful, captivating message.
An extremely beautiful poem about nature. Brought a smile to my heart. Thank you so much for sharing your lovely read. Very well done. Best regards.
Wow! enjoyed reading your writing, your poem is melodic. And seems to express the intimate emotions and feelings of the speaker towards the past and the act of moving on. Well here goes... The usage of repetition and vivid imagery adds to the emotive marker of the poem, which is an aspect of lyric poetry. The poem "Raise A Glass" trolls the theme of reflection on the past and the importance of pushing forward. The poem utilizes imagery and repetition to transfer the orator's message.
The first stanza commences with the title and encourages the reader to raise a glass to yesterday. The second stanza toasts all that has happened in the past, including mistakes. This may imply that the orator is accepting the past and is ready to move on from it.
The third stanza paints the image of a burning wicker bridge that is bright within the orator's soul. This vision may imply that the past is painful and is still affecting the orator. The fourth stanza portrays a rusted fender, which may symbolize the horror of past mistakes. This supports the idea that the speaker is struggling to let go of the past.
In the fifth stanza, the orator calls for oblivion of past sins. This implies that the orator wants to let go of the past and not be held back by it. The sixth stanza highlights this desire, voicing the hope that they may never live through that frightful day again or view upon the memories that rot their heart away.
The conclusive stanza reiterates the phrase "raise a glass," and the orator alludes that they will continue drinking until they forget again or until their last drink. This implies that the orator is using alcohol to cope with the pain of the past and seeking incognizance.
Across the board, the poem delivers a moving message about the importance of letting go of the past and moving forward. The usage of vivid imagery and repetition assists in reinforcing the message and creates a powerful emotional impact on the reader.
Thank you for sharing your work...I honestly enjoyed reading your work. Read it over and over to try to understand the words expressed. This is a raw emotive piece of writing. Very well done. Best regards.
So much resonates in this short, powerful read. How can so much emotion be transmitted to your reader in such few words? This is true mastery. Im in ah... Well here goes I lack skill in describing with few words so here goes... analysis. Your poetry "Finally Breathing" is a concise but powerful reflection on the experience of being rescued or helped after a challenging or traumatic experience. The first line sets the scene, illustrating a period of intense struggle or suffering that feels endless. The second line introduces a second person, "you," who plays a pivotal role in the orator's eventual recovery.
The third and fourth lines may imply a turning point in the orator's experience - the moment when "you taught me how to breathe." This could be a metaphorical portrait, depicting a juncture of clarity or support that helped the orator regain their strength and resilience.
The conciseness of the poetry leaves much open to interpretation, but the emotions and themes it borders on are universal. The picture of being saved or helped through a challenging time is a powerful one, and the poem grasps the relief and gratitude that can arise from that experience.
An extremely powerful read. Thank you for sharing your work. Best regards.
Your reads are so full of emotion. I truly enjoyed reading both. Well here goes...The poem "Stage Fright" expresses the anxiety and fear one experiences before and during a public performance, such as talking in front of an audience. The first stanza sets the scene, as the orator steps out into the spotlight and feels the weight of the audience's attention and judgment. The second stanza underlines the physical and mental effects of stage fright, as the speaker toils to find the right words and feels their body quivering with nervousness.
The second poem, "In Bed at Night," illustrates a different type of fear - the fear that emerges when one is alone with their thoughts in the darkness of night. The orator is unable to find tranquility and is tormented by their deepest fears and anxieties, which take the form of shadows and shapes in their mind. The conclusive line suggests a supernatural element, as the orator wonders if their fears could be driven by a sprite, a type of mischievous spirit from folklore.
Both poems explore the theme of fear and anxiety, but they do so in diverse contexts and with different imagery. "Stage Fright" focuses on the fear of public performance and the pressure of being watched and judged, while "In Bed at Night" explores the fear of one's own thoughts and the unknown.
Overall both of your poems are well done, and your signature honestly radiates in your reads. Thank you so much for sharing your work. Keep writing, I look forward to reading more. Best regards.
Wow, this is a very profound read. After reading your work over and over examining each word. I can truthfully say this is true sustenance for the mind. The beauty of words is they can be taken in by the reader in many forms. Well here goes analysis maybe off but...here goes. The poem "On The Shadows Edge" speaks to the intersection of cosmopolitan culture and the chasms of human suffering. It may imply that in this space, stories are waiting to be told, but only after they have been polished and refined through the process of "mutilating" and "paring down" non-essential elements.
The language utilized in the poem is rich with metaphor and imagery. The shadow illustrates the parts of ourselves and our experiences that we frequently try to hide or ignore, while the magic may symbolize the allure and enchantment of life. By shining too close to the shadow, we jeopardize losing the magic and the truth that it holds.
The phrase "cosmopolitan culture" implies the idea of a global society that embraces diversity and multiculturalism. Nevertheless, the poem appears to imply that even within this context, there are still deep, universal ventures of suffering that connect us all. The polishing edge may symbolize the forces in our lives that challenge us and force us to confront these experiences, eventually leading to a new understanding of ourselves and the world around us.
Across the board, "On the Shadow's Edge" is an intricate and thought-provoking poem that explores the intersection of culture, suffering, and the human experience.
Very well done with such few words. Made me think and stimulated my mind. Thank you so much for sharing your work. I look forward to reading more of your work. Best regards.
Printed from https://web1.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/payasa4141
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.09 seconds at 4:39pm on Sep 10, 2025 via server WEBX1.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
