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252 Public Reviews Given
262 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I will say what I liked about your piece and if I have any suggestions for improvement. My reviews are usually short, sweet and to the point. I prefer to review short stories but will look at poetry if asked to.
I'm good at...
finding mistakes with grammar/punctuation. Also I can let you know if your plot is effective.
Favorite Genres
Religious, romance, sci-fi, fantasy
Least Favorite Genres
erotica,sports
Favorite Item Types
Statics - short stories
I will not review...
anything overly sexual or violent, anything anti-Christian
Public Reviews
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jeffhans,

This is a charming and well-written story. I wasn't sure what a Mogwai was but I could figure it out from your story.

I saw nothing to correct.

I found this on the "Read & Review" tab.

Good job, and thanks for sharing!

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Beholden,

This is a very powerful and interesting story. I like the similies and writing style.

You're missing a period at the end of the ninth paragraph but otherwise I saw no technical issues.

The idea of someone being driven to murder by a song is a little hard to believe but possible if the protagonist was unstable enough.

Good job, and thanks for sharing!

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Review of The Diamond  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello HuntersMoon, PM here to review your poem.

It is beautiful and I see no suggestions for improvement.

I found it on the "Read & Review" tab.

Congrats on the win, and good job!

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Review of Love's Embrace  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim Chiu, PM here to review your poem.

I found it on the "Read & Review" tab.

It is short, but profound and beautiful.

I see nothing to change or improve.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!

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Review of Love  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Rene Maori, PM here to review your poem.

It's a strong poem with no discernable errors or improvements.

Good job, and thanks for sharing!

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Review of Rant  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Gratefully IE, PM here to review your story.

I found it on the "Read & Review" tab.

It's an interesting vignette with well- developed characters. It is also well-written and engaging.

I see no errors or problems.

Good job, and congrats on the win!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello W.D Wilcox, PM here to review your piece.

I found it on the "Read & Review" tab.

It's fascinating and well-written. The shifts in POV make it even more interesting. It also gives the piece a well-rounded feel.

I saw no grammatical errors.

Good job, and thanks for sharing!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello L.A Saxe, PM here to review your poem.

I found it on the "Read & Review" tab.

It's short and sweet. I would like to see you expand it, but it is lovely as is.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, PM here to review your poem.

I love the message. I admire how you wrote such a positive poem while in a dark place.

Good job, and keep writing!

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Review of Forêt a Nuit  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Nightblue, PM here to review your poem.

I took French in high school and college and can understand most of your poem.

It's the first poem that I recall reading in French. It's beautiful and well-written.

I see nothing to fix or improve.

Good job, and thanks for sharing!

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Review of Parallel World  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello jagfiction, PM here to review your poem.

I found it on the "Read & Review" tab.

I like it. It's well-written and has a good message.

I see nothing to fix or correct. I like the rhyme scheme.

Overall, good job with this.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!

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Review of Loss  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Soldier Mike, PM here to review your poem.

It's touching and sad. I am sorry for your loss.

I see nothing to fix or correct.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!

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Review of RAPTURE!  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Jaiam, PM here to review your poem.

I found it through the "Read and Review" tab.

I am a fellow Christian and could relate to the fear of being left behind.

I saw no technical errors, although the poem was very short. There is room to expand on it if you would like to but it works as it is.

Good job and thanks for sharing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Pumpkin, PM here to review your item.

It is well-written and glorious. Good job!

Edits:

At the start of the 5th paragraph "forth" should be "fourth".

It's a great piece. Thanks for sharing!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello HuntersMoon, PM here to review your story.

I found it on the "Read & Review" tab.

It's charming and cute. I like it. It's a fun and cute read.

I would recommend italicized your character's inner thoughts.

Good job, and congrats on the win!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Lou, PM here to review your poem.

I found it on the "Read & Review" tab.

I like it. The metaphor works, and the poem has a universal quality that many people can relate to.

I see nothing to fix or improve upon.

Good job, and keep writing!

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Review of Trees  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello Leslig, PM here to review your item.

Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you will enjoy your time here. Please let me know if there is any way I can be of help.

Onto your piece:

I like the message and the lesson.

The only suggestion I have for improvement is to "tell" less and "show" more. Instead of saying how your character feels, you could reveal it through his actions and words.

It is still a good start. Keep writing!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Spidey, PM here to review your vignette.

It is well written. I like the diction and imagery.

I see nothing to fix. If you wanted to you could expand it into a story but it works as a vignette the way it is. It is an enjoyable read.

Good job, and keep writing!

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Review of The Gift  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Wordsmith John, PM here to review your story.

It is a charming and well-written vignette. I like the diction and the imagery.

I do have a couple of notes for improvement:

The story is completely "told" rather than "shown". Rather than saying what your character thinks you could reveal it by what she says and does.

Also, the sudden change from past tense to present tense is distracting. I would recommend having the whole story in one tense or the other.

It is still a great story. Thanks for sharing!

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Review of Homeward Bound  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello HuntersMoon, PM here to review your poem.

It is beautiful, well-written, and flawless. I see nothing to improve. It's perfect.

Well done and congrats on the win!

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Review of On This Night  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Purple Holiday Princess, PM here to review your poem.

It is a nice, festive poem. I like the rhymes.

I see no errors.

Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.

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Review of Snowflake  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Amethyst Snow Angel, PM here to review your poem.

It is beautiful and profound. I see nothing to improve.

Good luck in the contest!

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Review of Traditions  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dave, PM here to review your poem.

It's cute and festive, with good diction.

I see nothing to fix.

Good job and I wish you luck in the contest.

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Review of Turkey, Anyone?  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Espero, PM here to review your story.

It's an interesting and believable story.

I would modify the sentence structure. You have several sentences with commas in the middle. It would read better if you broke them up into separate sentences.

Good luck in the contest!

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Review of Ki and Education  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, PM here to review your item.

It is well written and profound.

The only issues I see are the lack of punctuation and that the starts of sentences are not capitalized. It would read better as an essay with standard punctuation.

It is still an outstanding piece. With a little technical editing it would be even better.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!

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