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Review of King Of Beasts  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Overall, this is really good. I'm glad you upped the font size so my tired eyes could enjoy it. I need to start doing that myself.

I had a couple questions...

First, how did a pride of lions happen to get to New York? There's no zoos on the island.

Second, where in New York is a bus going to have room to drive, let alone park and disgorge passengers? The city busses can barely do that!

Third, why did the lions go on a rampage? Normally once they make a kill they eat it and the rest of the herd animals are safe. It's common to see gazelles, impalas, etc. less than a hundred meters from a pride of lions while the lions feed. The prey animals know it's safe. Lions (nor any other non-human predators) don't just randomly go on killing rampages.

Last, if our narrator dies, how is he able to tell this story?

Again, these are all minor so I don't want to distract from the fact that overall it's very good. I definitely enjoyed it. Thanks for writing it!
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Review of Gorilla Sapiens  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
First and foremost I think this is a fantastic story. The fact that it's plausible makes it that much better. I've often pondered if mankind was meant to be the only sentient species, or just the first.

My biggest critique would be that it reads like a summary. There's enough stuff here for a novel if you wanted to flesh it out. I hope you do.

The my other concern is the ending. It seems rather abrupt. And at no point do we get any sort of reaction from humans. Where are they in all of this? Do we somehow reject our nature and join the animals? Or do we continue to fight them?
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Very clever. Well written. My critique would be that the rhyming made it seem tongue in cheek. I suppose I HOPE it's tongue in cheek. I know I wouldn't want anything to do with a world where someone else governs my life with an iron fist like that, even if they think they mean well. Do they really know what's best for everyone?

Regardless, tapdancing on the line between prose and poetry like this isn't easy and yet it was very well executed.
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Review of The Vulture  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
That was quite the plot twist at the end. I was poking around looking for something light to break up the day and while I rarely reach for sci-fi, this caught my eye. Very well done. But as a proud alumni of The Orange And Green, it's a shame to me that it had to take place in "Northern Indiana!" :)
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice. I do my share of bushcrafting - which is kind of like scouting but for adults - so reading this allowed me to escape to the outdoors for a few minutes.

Thank you for the respite.
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