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Review of The Bishop's Son  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Awesome. Especially that the bishop did not comprehend that obscurity can come in many forms. I am proud of the son. He did a great job of doing the nearly impossible. The paragraph around the sword read to me as though he found it in several of the swamps.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I felt the first simile was a strong comparison. The next two seemed like less effort since they both involve plants, and a tree is a plant. they just weren't different enough to paint a picture in my mind. Now for the bad news, none of them are metaphors. They are similes. Metaphors transform things without the use of "like" or "as." Metaphors state that one object is another unrelated object to draw a symbolic meaning.

Trees are babies growing up to become adults.          works

Trees are flowers growing in a garden.                    sort of works

Trees are plants growing strawberries and peaches.          does not work it

peaches grow on trees          true but not a metaphor

strawberries grow on trees           false and not a metaphor because trees are plants.

I'm not trying to tear you apart; I am just trying to help you. I don't even think they teach it in school anymore. But as writers, we need to know. I hope I explained the terms so that they are clear.

Hey, we all have our weaknesses; mine are commas and spelling. Fortunately for me, Grammarly catches that kind of thing. Now you know similes (with like or as) and metaphors (with to be words)


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Review by WdC Birthday Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an interesting start to a story. I think you need to take it further. You might try putting in more senses than just vision. How does the chowder taste? And what is it like to eat it three meals a day? Do they get sick of it? I like the story within the story.
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Review of Family History  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Once again I am curious about the contest. I believe I know the prompt. And from the length can make an educated guess about the contest but I believe it would be better if you had linked the contest or named it in the description. If you don't want to mar the flow of the story you could always put the information in a drop note. It is a good story. Good job. You have something to be proud of here.


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Review of Sunset Melody  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am curious what the prompt was. I like to see how well contest entries follow their prompts. Especially when it comes to winning pieces. It gives me some idea how the judge's mind works. I do not understand the first line it does not feel right when read aloud especially not with the second line though I love this poem.
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Review of Is It Worth It?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a well rounded poem. It ties itself up in a pretty bow at the end of the story. Quite well written.it maintains the same phrase all of the way through the poem, following it like a formula or a roadmap. The scared new parent growing wiser. What I do wonder is if his wife survived the birth of their daughter.
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Review of Law and Order  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a sad life for a man made cynical by years of rescuing towns from crooked lawmen.

In the reward money paragraph it needs to either be a gunman or gunmen in my opinion to read right.

My wish is that sticky is wrong and the sheriff manages to stay honest.
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Review by WdC Birthday Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oh my! What a clueless man. Ballroom dancing is a gift. A desk set is a gift. Dinner at a nice restaurant is a gift. Buying a bar and grill is a burden he shouldn't be adding to her overflowing plate of worries. Year 8 is probably going to end up in a divorce.
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Review of Best Friends  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love it!!! The prompt words blend into the story like the just happened to be there. I always love stories that manage that with required words. You explained the prompt well, but mentioning and or linking the original contest or challenge would be nice, for next time.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow!!! That is powerful. It is well written, painted with words that captured what the camera could not. Amazing! It draws the color and sensations across my eyelids as I blink between phrases in disbelief at the details such few words managed to paint.


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Review of I Do, I Do, I Do  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ooh, party-crashing pickpockets, interesting choice for main characters. This is a dark story with a loving, life-changing moment in a couple's history being tarnished by a two-person crime wave. Are they going to get sticky fingers for the wedding presents?
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This essay definitely answers the title question. The fact that silence is dangerous is just common sense, but this essay makes clear why, in various circumstances, it is so dangerous. It is very well written and enjoyable. That can be hard to do in an essay meant to answer this kind of question.
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Review of First Date  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hey, hello kitty isn't that bad if your a ten year old girl... But into the twenties, or thirties? Still not the worst thing she could be into. It could have been 20 living cats... I like the sentences "Snakes, I could deal with. Hello Kitty? Man, that’s just whacked." It totally polishes off the story perfectly.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, that is a disaster. I was expecting the plane to crash or something, not for it to save the whole family and every other passenger. The scariest thing about the story is that it isn't completely implausible. That is an almost apocalyptic disaster.
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Review of Clarion Cry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This poem reminds me of my mother-in-law. This is how my mother-in-law raised my wife: belittling, gaslighting, neglecting, and abusing her. This is how my mother-in-law still treats my wife. Every time my wife talks to her mother, she hurts her. My wife doesn't have the strength to write a poem like this, not yet. Thank you for writing it for her.
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Review of I remember  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I wrote a poem very like this one about my mother; this one made me cry. I could see my mother doing the same things. I lost her too early. I am sure you lost this woman far before you would have chosen to. My eyes are blurry trying to type this. Thank you for sharing.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Uh, you used a forbidden word in stanza 5, "springs". That threw the whole poem on its edge for me because you put the prompt up front. Perhaps you should consider moving the prompt and the contest notes into a drop note at the bottom so that the technical flaw doesn't mar the poem.
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Review by WdC Birthday Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That is a scary eventuality. I remember this contest, and I think I got second place in one of the rounds. I miss it and wish it would run again. It was fun. As is your entry. It is great and I am so glad that your plea convinced the aliens to supply us all again.
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Review of Marked  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That is a dark poem. It is deeply creepy. I feel bad for the daughter. I feel bad for the mother. She had little hope of a normal life after being attacked. The daughter was cursed from conception and I was surprised that they even bothered to look for her.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a lovely poem and it seems even more current than it must have been when you wrote it. Wisdom is a thing in short supply these days, especially when it comes to the people in charge, and those who elected them. I am sure Trump would say "Aristotle who?"
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Awesome! You worked the prompt in really well. I would never have known what the prompt was if you hadn't bolded those words. It smoothly includes the prompt as though you were just writing the story, and it happened to include the prompt. I love your writing!!!
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Review of First Day  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a cute slice-of-life story. If this were written for a contest, you would benefit from putting a link to the contest and the prompt. It would also answer questions for your readers, most prominently, why the first sentence was bolded. Great story and great writting.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a cool story. I like the idea that different people have different abilities. It would have been cool if the narrator could talk to animals, too. Then she could be like the little mermaid and have friends like Sebastian and Flounder. I like her friends now. I think I would like to read more of this.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Awesome story. The fact that it is based on reality is even more awesome. And you wrote it so smoothly. it is just a really good story. I did not come across anything that dragged me from the story. I was immersed in it from the end. I love this story and would love to find out what inspired you to write it.
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Review of The Sandman  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oooh, twisted. I love this story. It is sooo deliciously vengeful. I wish it really were that easy to deal permanently with a man like that. It is well written and flowed smoothly from beginning to end. It really read as a highly satisfying conclusion to the situation
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