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Review of This Broken Earth  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Really nice chapter. A release from the tension of the last two, right up until the last scene. that wrenched things right back up. there is a lovely push and pull in the tension of this story. it's like real life in that way. I like the off duty time activities shown.
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Review of Angel Feathers  Open in new Window.
for entry "Duck Family Vacation" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That is an absolutely cute story. It was family friendly. Though I think the writing style isn't quite what I think of when I think of writing for kids. It is a good story. I love the characters. But it disturbed me that Daisy is Donnie's sister. I mean, given Disney.
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Review of The Voice Inside  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is creepy. The voice sounds like a demon or some kind of evil spirit. I can see the poor kid trying desperately to resist the voice's commands. The poor tortured dude. I would not like to be in his place. I really wonder what the voice will make the aunt do.
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Review of Wrong Turn  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That is a sad story. I liked it a lot. For me it was told in a very real way. I felt like I was sitting around that table with the author and the storm chasers. I felt where it was going before it got there but that did not reduce the impact for me any. I felt the part about the hospital was rushed, but it felt right that it would be. They would not want to linger over the details at that point. Again a great story from you.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
That was adorable! The dialect you used was perfect! I thought that the main character was absolutely awesome. I have to say that some of the punctuation around the dialect was odd to me, but it worked well enough that I can not say it was wrong. Another great story, thanks for posting it and bringing it to my attention.
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Review of The Snake  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a smooth poem. It comes off as highly complimentary and sympathetic towards the snake, despite the fact that it is a deadly murderous creature. It leans heavily on the reality that the snake has to eat. It gives me a new way to appreciate the strength and value of the predator.
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Review of Blue Bird Flies  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a lovely poem. I am reviewing it on your first WdC anniversary. You have great writing potential. This poem is well written. It tells a good story. I was rooting for the bluebird and was disappointed that he did not make it to the sky. This poem also calls to the potential of the writer and the reader. I hope you come back online and are greeted with this review in your inbox.
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Review of Celestial Wars  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I like this story. The magic came as a cool surprise to me. The two old lady's taking off on the bike together was entertaining. I could see the dumbfounded looks on the bikers' faces. It made me giggle. The two observers in the sky seemed awfully disappointed that the women diffused the situation so simply.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a cool vignette. It makes very vivid images form in my mind. I can only imagine what it must be like to go in there and find a natural solution to summer heat. This summer has been so hot. Worse than that one of our window air conditioner died and it took us a week to replace it.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is interesting. A trip through your psyche. I hope you know how much we all care about you thank you for hanging in there for us. Dark places are terrible places to be. I
hope this piece was cathartic for you.

I am sorry you keep revisiting this place. I wish we could bury our problems too.
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Review of The Missing Coins  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
awesome use of the prompt, i loved it. It is genius how the mom was able to take her son down a peg. His head was entirely too swollen over how good a magician he was. I wonder if she is going to tell him or if she is just going to keep the secret to his failure to herself.
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Review of Angel Feathers  Open in new Window.
for entry "Liberty" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Excellent use of the prompt. It really worked for me. Liberty is a likeable character. I was worried the whole time you were just setting us up for a disappointing twist like basically her new parents do not come for her. I was worried they would get into an accident or just change their mind. I was pleasantly surprised when they arrived with gifts. I am glad I didn't see the prompt before I finished reading. Perhaps it would be better to stick the prompt and the note on the contest in a drop note or pop note. I know it would have ruined the story for me if i had seen it before I finished the story.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a unique short story. I tells of a situation all too common to us writers. I used to have a real problem writing in notebooks and journals. I would buy them because I liked the cover, then I would not write in them because I was afraid of ruining them. Eventually I hit on the secret I needed. I would work on my penmanship I would write the alphabet over and over until my brain filled with words. By then I had already "ruined" it so the words could not be worse. Now I write shopping lists and reminders then eventually stories flow.
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Review of Ben's Quest  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a cool story. I like it. It seems entirely reasonable. It seems that history is cyclic anyway. But is there really enough DNA variation in just two people for them to repopulate the planet by themselves, or will Ben be bringing forward more specimens for diversity?
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Review of Good night  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very whimsical poem. It reminds me of childhood and a parents wish for a child. The various parts hold together well. It is definitely thematically consistent. I think there should be one more stanza break in the middle of the eight lined stanza to make it look right. Was this prompted by something? You might check and see if it qualifies for the writing for kids contest this month if it's being held.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow that is creepy! I love the way you used the prompt. I have read one other entry for this prompt and it was cool too. I am curious if I could do half as well. This really is a complete story wrapped up in a well written piece of poetry. He seems really scary.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Awesome. How did I miss this piece last month?the showing is so vivid the magic is alive and vibrant. Your muse is so beautiful. I wish my little Daisy was still as freely giving of her magic. Things like this were more common between us when I was younger and not possessing a tenth of my current writing abilities. Alas I fear never writing anything half as cool as this piece. It was smooth and flowed appearingly effortlessly great job.
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Review of The Skirt  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Awesome! Well polished! Defiance well shown. I doubt I can write a review adequate to express the quality of this story. You captured the before and after of an iconic moment in history. The point where women take the first steps towards finding their equality and freedom.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Cool story. I missed the prompt. I would have probably chosen Dobby. I love yours though. It seems very true to the world and the characters. Lee seemed just as reckless and brave as Harry and as compassionate. Too bad the book was not from his point of view.
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for entry "Fools Be Free" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Short and to the point. I like it but I am not sure it is a full story really, it does not seem to have a real plot to it. He just sits on the hill. Okay he sees everything but what all does he see and what does he think about any of that stuff. He is an interesting character but, I am left wanting more.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wild story! You were really naughty. But it sounds like it was worth it! And there was no real harm. I am glad you got to discover their gratitude and were able to share it with the other veterans out there. Because that kind of thing is why they take the risks they do. I just wish their was equivalent gratitude for all of our wars.
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Review of Take my hand  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a sweet inspirational poem. It is very much about hope from the beginning. Hope shown not told, in such a beautiful way, it gave me warm fuzzies. There is not a distinct sex given to the adult or child which gives it universal appeal for me. It could be a mother or father or even grandmother elevating a child of either gender. It could be my nephew or your grand daughter it could be any of us.
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Review of The Umbrella  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Creepy the umbrella takes possession of its bearer to what end? I wonder what happens when the rain stops. Or is the umbrella causing the rain. It has planned its next bearer probably has its endgame planned out too. There are so many ways to expand this into something more.
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This is an interesting poem. It warps reality a bit for me. It is almost as if you are personifying the muffin. I really like it. It made me hungry. It made me think of muffins and their pure, simple enjoyability. It really is well written in my opinion. Though the notes on the poem should probably be better separated from the poem. They confused me at first. Until I realized that they were notes.
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Review of Promptly Poetry  Open in new Window.
for entry "Write and Live" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice poem! Mine for this week sucks! Your's looks like any ordinary poem that just flowed out of you onto paper effortlessly. Like inspiration struck and wham bam thank you ma'am you have an good poem sitting in front of you. I struggled to get down something terrible.
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