Good humid afternoon, JACE Random review is busy. I have a poem with the same title, and will say nothing like this, the impulse to ponder. The form is very creative, and got me interested, somber prose, and well edited. Thanks! I enjoyed.
Good day, 🌖 HuntersMoon Never too early for a Christmas poem and this is really touching in it's tine and heartwarming imagery of holiday things that warm.
Spelling error in the description. Random review link found you, and I always enjoy prose set on simple imagery and easily answers questions and self reflection and this ticks all those boxes. Many questions get answered as we age, and experiences we have along the way. We do be born crying but I'm not sure its hunger, more lungs reacting. Great editing, no errors beyond what I mentioned at first, and I'm glad I had a chance to read this. Thanks! staiNed
Creative, Well written and a delight to read. To be honest, the tone is usually not my cup of java, but I can't argue this is interesting, and asks some questions, romantic, and soft soften. No suggestions, here's a high five.
I have never happened across quite a prose like this, while emptiness festers. The thoughts when you can't think of anything constructive, and creative, yet somehow this is both. More questions and no provided imagery that may suggest answers. The disappointment and small angry flashes making one temporary blind. I enjoyed, thanks!
Thanks for sharing and the clarification on the form used it made more sense to me. Morning coitus is a lot of people primed time and would be as described in this quick small poetry form, not one I have ever heard of, superb use of it. Thanks!
Creative, short and not very emotional but vivid in what is expressed. Metaphorical, those inner feelings we all carry, the trauma, and misunderstood sight. I think the first line, second stanza punctuation isn't correct. Other than that a well written prose. Thanks!
Good Afternoon, good old random review link brought me. Synthia
I think it's common for people to have emotional walls, though they may be aware they know they are, or are unable to install windows though they want to. Being in love can be scary no doubt about it. Loving your kids or family is different kind of love than another person. This is simple but somewhat impactful as it raises some interesting self reflection questions. Perhaps centering it might add more glitter. Thanks for sharing.
Good afternoon, LeJenD' Random review link, and right off the bat, thanks for the authors note. Chickens, chicken man, Hmmm I can't say much, I knew what was pecking, very easy to understand. Nice though, as it is not sad, or angry or romantic. Rhyme is well done, and edited well.
Good Afternoon, Bernie Wonderful random review link,a lot of great thoughts triggered in this easily understood poem. Really liked to last line, impactful. Time taken to edit, and a nice read, although I'm not a romantic. High five! staiNed
Description is good, poem carries well but has a error in the first stanza, I think "I" should be "by". Well told and honestly there is some imagery that brings self reflection to the table. Like seeing yourself in a copper mirror, dim, cloudy and far away. Thank you for sharing, and enjoy your day.
Small interesting paragraph, asking a lot of philosophical questions. Gives the reader some time for self reflection to perhaps muse of these questions. I would suggest perhaps editing it into a free verse poem to give it structure and imagery. Something like this as a example.
The sins of a nation come back to haunt them,
Do the sins of a man or woman eventually come back to haunt them?
Men and Women can not escape their sins!
Eventually, it will come back and seek reckoning.
This is all just a suggestion, it is well edited and easy to understand. Thank you for sharing.
Great, I emjoyed this a lot, so quiet a story till she crawled back into bed, What a dream indeed, crazy impact, I almost dropped my coffee. Full five this is just so well done, not too long, not overly descriptive but that lack made the ending spot on.
Goodness 🌖 HuntersMoon This is great, what a well written and difference look at Tec but all true. It's amazing what prompts can ignite at times and this is no exception. Thank you for sharing with me, random review is so helpful.
Very well thought out, Peace. I like the two stanzas that start with Peace, what that may be, why there is none, so much is said. So many things and again well written, Thumbs up! I see no errors for here's a full five, this is really good. staiNed
Random Review. Anointed Awoleye Well written, self reflection imagery, full of spirit, and kindness, questions, and desires. Things change, ourselves included, but time never stops, we all end as we start, star dust. Thank you for sharing, thoughtful and edited.
How creative, I appreciate random review taking me to read it. Love, torn, remembered, not wanted, missed, so much expressed, but not overt romantic. Perhaps into two stanzas might emphasise the feelings I saw. Thanks, Tootles, Writing is great. staiNed
Good Afternoon, Sarah J. Smith Random review link brought me and I gotta say this is well done, the description doesn't give it credit, its simple, expressive, asks and answers some of those romantic questions we find ourselves asking sometimes. The hope of perhaps more. Well edited, I see no punctuation errors. Thanks! staiNed
Good afternoon, An Haiku, good old Japanese. Scotty1615 I know the form, never tried it I believe if my memory is correct, this is good, short, impactful and gives the reader thoughts to ponder on. One short step at a time, don't think about the whole picture only a scene in that picture. Deadlines are something of the same. Some my think we need them for order, and correction, but hinder and overwhelm a deadline can do also.
Lyrics aren't easy to write, as the melody may be different to who reads. Love lyrics is as too..That said, I do see feelings in this, and the slow raw song. Take us all away, to the place where dreams are like electric sheep. No suggestions, Thanks. staiNed
Good humid afternoon, SeanFhear A crow within a crowd of white, and that difference delightfully described as belonging but different, but that different is a good thing not as we all would see a crow being. Well written, thank you for sharing.
Impactful, and sad, for people to feel this way truly is heartbreaking, I hope sharing placed you in a for whatever its worth a different place. Straight to the point, not over dramatized. A lot of feeling, raw sadness and confusion.
The battles we have everyday are worth it. Thank you for sharing. No suggestions.
This is such a touching poem, I enjoyed a lot, and am kind of moved but the many feelings that are expressed in each stanza of such a poetic piece. My oldest is PDDNOS and he so brilliant, so smart but labeled, he smiles like no else. Hardships strengthen us, and makes us softer to give way and absorb the next tumble.
Well written and such a strange topic, I couldn't imagine such a fetish, if that's what it could be called, but can relate as I when really out of sorts and denying that will pick my own skin. Impactful and really spot on in mood, and setting, I could see those tweezers, and the garbage can, the unsettled feelings, the inability to stop. I hope it helped sharing, take care.
Very well said, without saying too much. Names might fade, stones worn to time and weather, but I agree we never forget. Thanks! I enjoyed and see no errors. Creative and quite sad.
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