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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oooooh very scary! I enjoyed your story very much. No mistakes were evident to me. I liked how you coloured the speaking parts :) mirrors are funny things aren’t they! Not so long ago it was customary where I live to cover a mirror in a thunderstorm or in the parlour where a dead body was lying. We didn’t have so many funeral homes then :) Well done.

Shirley
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful, though poignant story, more of a piece of prose actually. I love how you use the weather to emphasise the coming and going of love. If you made it longer we would get to know tbe characters better and the story would grow deeper, but it is fine how it is now. Well done.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes, I enjoyed reading your piece and sympathised with your situation, although different to mine. I can feel how you just want time to yourself to write, without interruption. That comes through very strongly and you have described it well.
The piece is succinct, yet it tells us all we need to know. I think with a piece of work like this, you do need to set a time boundary because you could have made it much longer. That would have given it more depth, but it may have lost some of the 'punch.' There is nothing wrong with the English or the grammar, not that I could see, anyway. I'm looking forward to reading some more of your work, especially the children's pieces.
I'm giving you five stars for this piece because it achieves what you set out to do and it made me want to read more :)
Well done!
Shirley
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