There were some minor spelling and punctuation errors that a couple of editing “read through” will take care of, such as
My pelt is a beautiful as any other selkies pelt
Here, it should ‘my pelt is as beautiful’ and there should be an apostrophe at the end of selkies to indicate possession.
The thing I most loved about this story is the rhythm in which it is told. Everything about it makes it feel like an old Irish tale, which I love. Fantastic story. Well done.
I had never heard of dizain poems before, but I was fascinated once I discovered them. It is a challenge to express one’s thoughts in a restricted poetic form, but you’ve done so beautifully.
The imagery invoked in this poem is spot on. You present the differences between the two worlds which are simultaneously juxtaposed with each other beautifully. The air these verses cast over my soul is gray and…I was going to say remorseful, but instead I’ll use the word remorseful. Well done.
This was a great read, especially the second half. I do think the story as a whole could do with an overall editing to deal with issues like run on sentences, verb tense mismatches and the like, but otherwise very enjoyable. The Spaniards did have the technological edge over the original indigenous empires, but it was disease that helped the Spaniards defeat those Empires. Vikings would be a whole different matter. Again, well done.
So I stumbled on this doing a word search for ‘Viking’ and I was halfway tbrough it before discovering this was from one of favorite new found lyricists on WDC.
There is a very grim, determined meatiness to these lyrics. The only line I didn’t like in the entire song was Forged by dwarves so skilled and planned!. It wasn’t a bad line, per se. But there’s this rhythm of endurance through a darkness that necessity requires be willingly embraced throughout the song that this line doesn’t seem to echo.
A very interesting and quick read on a festival I’ve never heard of before. A few minor spelling errors (such as near the end where ‘joyous’ is spelled ‘joyous’) and questionable punctuation (such as the final sentence ending with a question mark), but otherwise very good.
Once I saw this puzzle was about Imagine Dragons, I didn’t even need to check the author to see it was you. Good shape, good clues, all around good job.
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