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Review of CLEARLY ESTRANGED  Open in new Window.
Review by TeeGateM Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Review:
This poem carries the quiet ache of something once beautiful unraveling. It reads like a slow farewell between two people who once believed deeply in love, now caught in the disorienting space where tenderness turns hollow. The author’s imagery—“a shared truth finally swallowed by shadow,” “hugged in unwanted embraces,” “a slow death, alongside a forgotten highway”—strikes with emotional precision. Every line feels deliberate, written by someone who has lingered too long in the echo of what used to be home.

The poem’s rhythm mirrors grief itself: uneven, hesitant, fading in and out like breath. There’s no anger here, only a weary honesty. The writer captures the numbness that comes when love doesn’t end in explosion, but in quiet erosion. I was struck by the way it explores indifference as a kind of death—something worse than heartbreak because it erases feeling altogether.

What makes this piece powerful is its restraint. It doesn’t plead or accuse; it simply observes. That simplicity makes it devastating. I still believe in love, but reading this reminded me how fragile belief can be when trust and tenderness dry up. The poem lingers like dust after sunlight—a meditation on what remains when love fades, and two people stay out of habit rather than hope.

It’s both beautiful and painful, a work of quiet devastation that asks us to consider how something once sacred can slip into silence, thread by thread, until only memory remains.
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Review by TeeGateM Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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This poem surprised me—in the best way. At first glance, its formal tone and elevated language feel traditional, but as I read deeper, I realized how intentionally it weaves that formality into emotion. It carries both reverence and reflection, asking readers to pause and think about the cost of ideals like freedom, sacrifice, and national pride.

What struck me most was the rhythm of conviction running through every stanza. It reads almost like a speech, yet somehow feels deeply personal—rooted in respect for veterans and the complex morality of service. The imagery and phrasing evoke both strength and sorrow, giving a sense of history and heart. I found myself rereading it several times, and each time another meaning surfaced. The more I read, the more I admired how it balanced strength with vulnerability and intellect with empathy.

It’s not the kind of poem I usually gravitate toward, but it’s powerful, intelligent, and beautifully original—a piece written with questioning grace. The language reaches back to something timeless, reminding us that gratitude and reflection can coexist in the same breath.

What I appreciate most is how it honors service while still inviting the reader to think deeply about the moral and emotional weight of those sacrifices. It’s a poem that lingers—one that challenges without preaching and moves without forcing sentiment. A powerful, thought-provoking piece that feels both relevant and enduring.


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Review of His Mother Cried  Open in new Window.
Review by TeeGateM Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Right on point.
A Powerful, Heart-Stirring Story of Compassion and Courage

This piece is a deeply moving testament to integrity, empathy, and the quiet heroism found in everyday educators. From the very first scene, the narrative captures the fragile world of a young boy misunderstood by the system, and the brave, compassionate educator who refuses to let him slip through the cracks.

The storytelling is intimate yet impactful. With clarity and emotional precision, it reveals how a single moment of attentive humanity can change the trajectory of a child’s life. The contrast between institutional indifference and genuine care is portrayed with remarkable honesty. The stakes feel real, and the justice — when it finally comes — lands with a sense of triumph and hope.

The central figure, Sharanya, is written with strength, grace, and conviction. Her quiet determination and unwavering belief in the child’s potential are inspiring. Nishad’s journey is handled with sensitivity and respect, highlighting not weakness, but brilliance waiting for recognition and support.

This narrative shines a light on dyslexia not as a limitation, but as a misunderstood gift — a perspective society desperately needs. It also exposes the flaws in academic systems while reminding us that change often begins with a single voice refusing to be silent.

Uplifting, courageous, and deeply human, this story is a must-read for educators, parents, and anyone who believes in the power of compassion to transform lives. It leaves the reader with hope, admiration, and a renewed belief in what true education should look like.

A beautiful, inspiring piece — powerful in message and unforgettable in impact.

punctuation notes (optional polish, not required)

Just things you might tighten if you ever wanted absolute consistency:
1. Ellipses style
You switch between:
no defiance … nothing.
vs
twenty minutes,.

Either is acceptable, but tightening to one consistent form (with or without spaces) could smooth it.

2. Capitalization after dialogue tags
“it’s the middle of the term,”
Should technically be “It’s—capital I after opening quote.

3. Comma + period doubles
twenty minutes,.
Should be just one mark — likely a period.

4. Comma after introductory phrase
First thing the next morning I requested
Optional, but technically:
First thing the next morning, I requested

5. Comma after “Yes, yes,”
Yes, yes, Mr. Dwarkadas.
Right now you have:
Yes, yes Mr. Dwarkadas.
(Not critical — still understandable.)

Where the heart sits is your super power!
This reads clean, confident, lived-in. The small inconsistencies almost serve the narrator’s voice — someone trying to stay composed while feeling deeply.

Sometimes perfect grammar sterilizes a beating moment. This still beats.

Bottom line
If the intent is clarity, it’s already there.
If the intent is clinical correctness, there are microscopic tweaks.
But honestly? The rhythm breathes.

You caught the ache in it. That’s the real point.
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