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I'm good at...
Pointing out things that you could tweek to make it flow more, or sound better. I point out the little things that we often don't catch.
Favorite Genres
Dystopian, SciFi, realistic fiction, poetry, nature, gay/lesbian, fantasy, erotica
Favorite Item Types
Static items, images, audio, forums
Public Reviews
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Review of Wake Up? Dead?  Open in new Window.
Review by LoveDystopian Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I love how you start it off. It's so abrupt, and gets the reader thinking. What if...? As much as it has a random feel, the sad feeling is lost in the aimless thoughts. I'm not sure if you were going for that, or if you were trying to get the feel, but lost it. This piece has it's ups and downs, but overall very well done!!!
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Review of Night sounds  Open in new Window.
Review by LoveDystopian Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is GREAT!!! Everything goes together like a puzzle. When you close your eyes, it's like you're actually outdoors, maybe camping with a friend, just looking up at the stars...

Excellent job!

~LD
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Review of Planet Earth  Open in new Window.
Review by LoveDystopian Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Item Number: 1851958
Item Name: Planet Earth
User: jpmurphy
Handle: jpmurphy

First Thoughts:
I love the rhyming! This is a great poem about your view of what the world has become. Such a creative idea!

Descriptions:
There is no real descriptions, but the word choice some what acts like it. The words add depth to the poem.

Errors/Suggestions:
There were no errors that I came across.

Favourite Part:
The rhyming and the message.*Smile*

Conclusion:
YOU are a great poet! I see that most of the items in your portfolio are poetry and can't wait to read more! You have a way with words. Please, update your bio! It would be a great help to get to know you.

~ LoveDystopian


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Review of Hog N' Dogs  Open in new Window.
Review by LoveDystopian Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your blog is great! I love dogs and have one of my own. I like hearing about other people's dogs. Your dogs sound like little darlings. Thank you for making this! It is truly amazing!
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Review by LoveDystopian Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Item Number: 2045005
Item Name: Breathing Your Love Away
User: bee353897
Handle: Barnaby

First Thoughts:
You have a way with words. This made me cry! That's how emotional it is. And I have never experienced love (except my puppy) or a breakup.

Description:
AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I loved your word choice and every bit of it was spectacular. (I can't wait to read more of your work!)

Errors/Suggestions:
I could find no errors, but if you haven't entered this into a contest, you really should!

Favourite Part:
Everything!

Conclusion:
YOU are very talented! This piece shows that poetry doesn't have to rhyme.

~LoveDystopian
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Review by LoveDystopian Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Item Number: 2046369
Item Name: I've Been Looking For You
User: purplesunday
Handle: Choconut

First Thoughts:
Um... an alien? Sure, why not? I would have never thought of it and never even suspected that that was what was the problem.

Story Line:
Dr. Keith Rose is a doctor. It was hard to find the problem from his third "patient". But he wouldn't give up. SPOILER: As it turns out, the problem is an alien, who he then kills.

Description:
Not much of it, so maybe you could add some more? Your word choice is great, though. *Smile*

Errors/Suggestions:
In the first paragraph, "Dr" should have a period after it. That's all.

Conclusion:
This piece has lots of suspense. I can tell it's a contest entry, but maybe you should have added a bit more to it. Or maybe create a new item and write a 2nd draft.

~LoveDystopian
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Review of Sleepless Nights  Open in new Window.
Review by LoveDystopian Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I am here to give YOU
a review!


Item Number: 2045991
Item Name: Sleepless Nights
User: logannariannaa
Handle:Belle Air

First Thoughts:
Whoa. I totally agree with this piece. I would have NEVER thought of this! Such a creative idea!

Story Line/Plot:
It's on those sleepless nights when your mind explores farther than you please.

Character(s):
Whoever you want it to be: you, a friend, an enemy, anyone.

Descriptions:
LOVE THEM!!! "Letting my mind wander to those dark, dreary dreadful places of my mind that I somewhat despise." WOW!!! Now that's what I call talent!

Errors/Suggestions:
None that I could find : )

Favourite Part:
It's too hard to pick!

Conclusion:
You are an AMAZING author! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!! Keep up the awesome work!

~ LoveDystopian
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Review by LoveDystopian Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
i love the puns! I would never thought of it! The cat is very cute in that picture. And that's saying something since I'm not very fond of them.
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