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Review Style
Im happy to review most things, if it holds my interest though I will be less sloppy and more engaged.
I'm good at...
My main strength is the nuance of a story, does it flow well, does it hold the reader's interest. Things like plot and motivations. I'm fairly good at grammar and punctuation and will be happy to point out what I see.
Favorite Genres
action adventure fantasy
Least Favorite Genres
Erotica if it's just smut
Favorite Item Types
Stories with worldbuilding, involved characters, and fantasy elements. I really love post apocalyptic worlds, if you have one I'd love to read it.
Least Favorite Item Types
Erotica if it's just smut with no story, and werewolf stories
I will not review...
Erotica if it's just smut
Public Reviews
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Review of Inner exile  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very deep dive into some very difficult inner feelings. It was very few words that said much. I think many of us have felt like this trying to live amongst society. Being what everyone expects trying to be strong. I really like this entry and I hope that in someway writing helps you to feel better.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved this story. It took me back to when I was a child and someone used to read me a story about the tiniest tree in the forest that always wished it was larger. Then once it got larger, it realized it wasn’t so good to be big as it got cut down for wood. This would make a really good children’s book with the right illustrations I really enjoyed it. Your writing had a feeling it innocence and beauty. Thank you for sharing.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I don’t usually stop by to read poetry but I really enjoyed this. It was an interesting reflection upon how the weather does mess with our emotions. The only thing I will say that makes it a bit clunky for me is the repeated use of the word sky. It does pop up numerous times in quick succession. You may want to consider a different word if you can get it to fit into the rhyme. Other than that, it was really lovely. Keep writing! Cheers!


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I stopped by this quite by accident, but it drew me in. In the brevity of words, it said much. Those last moments of someone’s life who is bound to die, the finality. It is quite a powerful expose of how many court intrigues came to their end. And the touch of the poison tea was a wonderful masterstroke. Keep writing you have talent.


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Review of Mister  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The passage you provided though not very long is a delightful poem of love. It is a cozy and heartwarming narrative, I can see the scene in my mind, and I could see why your friend loved it.

Here's a review focusing on its strengths and areas for potential refinement.

Overall Impression

The narrative is engaging and immersive, drawing the reader into a brief moment of time, that first impression of love, and the meeting of a soul mate.

Atmosphere

* Vivid Imagery: The descriptions of the "Walking by flower shops, smelling the flowers on the way" connotate happiness and a sense of well being, without needing extensive exposition.

Specific Suggestions for Improvement

* The last line in the first verse is rather clunky "Saw this Man from the street, I can't ignore this charming man" The use of the word man twice does not read well, and interrupts the the narratives flow. Perhaps consider varying the final word to something like..."Saw this Man from the street, I can't ignore this charming chap" or something else along those lines that reads better.

Conclusion

This is a strong and heartwarming piece of poetry. The author has a clear vision for the feeling it generates. The strengths far outweigh the areas for refinement, which are mostly about polishing and subtle enhancements rather than fundamental changes. With a careful edit, this poem could be even more impactful...Well done! Xonereth


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